A good old ransacked office, always an iconic scene of such noir style stories. That was an interesting one and certainly one of the most fortuitous instances of being beaten up.
Solomon said:The magnitude of anguish washing over me in cascading waves of eternal pity threatens my sanity, and all I see is her; also, yesterday some sausage-vendors showed up and beat my ass silly. S.
Indeed it was. I wasn't sure how I was going to proceed through this scene and needed the shake up. I'll go ahead and say, I'm not sure it worked as well as I wished it had. But it got the job done.A good old ransacked office, always an iconic scene of such noir style stories. That was an interesting one and certainly one of the most fortuitous instances of being beaten up.
Good question about Temple. I played it as though Huard could trust Franklin. I did not make it specific, but the two men know each other from previous dealings and I'm not quite through with Temple just yet.Caught up at last. More of the pieces are in play, now. I agree with the suggestion that our two present-day hunters will find something or someone of interest at the 'old' address. Must be a pretty famously run-down area if Sam knows immediately that it was once the home of the rich and famous. Perhaps he has a personal connection nearby.
It doesn't speak well for Sam that he let the two of them be beaten up so easily. Perhaps he'll be more aware of the danger now, and take precautions.
In the previous post, Huard reveals quite a lot to Temple Franklin. Is this because he believes Benjamin Franklin might have made some confidences, or is he just certain that Temple will never talk?
Well, could I really write something based in 1938 and NOT have Nazis? I mean, really! As for Germany united and such, let me wait on answering that. It's a bit more complicated and I'll try to get it out in the story.It's the eye of the dragon.
Nice nice, evil nazis in this aar also?
Or is germany even united, if a eu3 game is behind this?
That's funny, phargle. You know, you may be right? In truth, I didn't feel comfortable with the manner in which I used them but I think I can still make it work. Initially, that was intended to be somewhat later but I realized I needed a way to get them back upstairs...in a sense, just like a GM. But it does seem to come out of nowhere. I don't mind that slight comedic touch even if it's not intended. And I have a subsequent scene that may explain it a bit better. Still - not my best work.Mmmm, ze Germans. Without being critical of the writing, that scene for me was amusing because I read it as being utterly random. It was like having a totally serious story, like Passion of the Christ, and then having a couple of guys show up out of the blue:
"Bist du Herr Nazareth?"
"Yea, that is unto me; who wants to know?"
"Gekicken deine ass!"
It made me smile. I'd say every story needs more random asskickings by Germans, and swear here and now to try to do exactly that in at least one AAR I write:
Regarding your AAR, the false bottom of the the drawer was so obvious that I am appalled Sam didn't see it himself the first time, but he may have been distracted by the smart-alec reporter. At least he had the sense to put two and two together and go back in to find what he'd missed the first time. Actually, in that sense, this AAR reads a bit like a roleplaying game, with the players being put back on course by the GM with a sensible application of ze Germans.
Excellent to see you're on board, robou! I appreciate the compliment and hope I can keep up the high standards it appears I've set for myself.This is brilliant Coz. The writing is superb and the story is exciting. While I have no energy left today to conjure up a theory, this has really left me thinking, especially the last two chapters. I am looking forward to seeing this pan out further!
You'll see...eventually. I think you are on the right track.Cool. He's a zombie of sorts now? Or the regular vampire? Guess we'll see within the next few updates.
Hmmm...more on that later.Oh! Creepy... A guess this makes him more than a vampire now...
I'm glad it had a ghostly feel. In certain elements I am definitely going for spooky so it is working. And no, the world still exists in '38.*shivers*
This is not a good AAR to read at night
Speaking of hungry I think I am...
Anyways, we know this zombie doesn't destroy the world as 1938 still exists!
Looking at it, they look that way to me too. I really wanted an arm coming out fo the ground but couldn't find it. Strange - so many horror films have used it. I like the fingers though. Gets the point across.Hunger, or Hungary?
Btw, those fingers made me think of mushrooms. o
Great to have you on board, TreizeV! I always value your comments. There is definitely some adventure to be had with this AAR, but I am enjoying writing in the noir moments, and as you can see - having my fun with the creepier aspects. If I can get as much darkness into this as you have in Resistance: Fall of Man - An Oral History, then I am doing a good job.Very nice Coz. Felt like a whole Noir film unfolding before my eyes, then came the whole vampire angle :S it does not help that I am reading this at night. Nice! I like the whole detective/vampire angle, and this search for the gem reminds me a lot of Indiana jones. Vampires + Indiana Jones + Film noir = win. It's great ot be reading one of your AARs again.
You definitely got the mood there. And yes...troubles are just beginning for our "waking" man.This is exactly the sort of tale that should be read at night - a night with a heavy fog with tendrils that curl in the light of the lamps, with an occasional gust of chill northerly air to cause the fire in the heath to sputter and threaten to go out.
It seems clear that his troubles start now.
I admit, I am sketching it with some secrets still in the bag so it may be a little hard to place everything together, but I promise it is there for a reason. If only I could churn it out faster.Hmm, so somewhere between a Vampire and a Zombie, but until we know who this and the vampire earlier was, I fear we will not be able to comprehend what is happening. I'm sure both Sam and Abraham will help us discover what is going on...
How could I know Joe likes mysteries? You keep me honest now. If it doesn't work, I need to know and you know your way around a mystery. As for Sam's plagues...well, you know there has to be more than one. A whole bunch of them, to be exact.You mentioned earlier that you had more work to do on the “atmosphere” of the story. Well don’t worry about that, you’ve created an excellent back drop to the story.
Of course I’d have to admit I have a soft spot for mysterious books containing secrets.
Now the question is are the two beefy Germans Nazis or some other lower life form that are here to plague Sam?
I like Sam he’s capable of getting the crap beat out of him but still comes up thinking. Jasper isn’t too bad either. Hope he sticks around.
Joe
Indeed. The question will be, how dark? That's going to be a struggle for him, I expect.Excellent chapter here, it appears as if our friend has turned to the *Dark* side.
Great work as usual!
I have actually never read that book but have watched the movie many times. Just watched it the other week. And you'd be right about that. No woman that comes into a detective's office can be on the up and up. It's a rule, by God.Having recently read The Maltese Falcon, I have my suspicions about this dame who hired Sam, although my logical sense says that would be too cliche.
Quite good stuff, the Eye of the Dragon is a great stone to be running around after.
I have actually never read that book but have watched the movie many times. Just watched it the other week. And you'd be right about that. No woman that comes into a detective's office can be on the up and up. It's a rule, by God.