Crazy Cat Person. Meow!
- Feb 10, 2007
Good dialogue coz1. Good update overall. Catches the atmosphere of the time very well I think.
The realm rejoices as Paradox Interactive announces the launch of Crusader Kings III, the latest entry in the publisher’s grand strategy role-playing game franchise. Advisors may now jockey for positions of influence and adversaries should save their schemes for another day, because on this day Crusader Kings III can be purchased on Steam, the Paradox Store, and other major online retailers.
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Well, there goes my observation . You forgot lawyers and insurance salesmen...Interesting parallel here - his old pals from the force think he's only one step above being a loser, and he thinks the reporter is only one step above being a loser. I wonder what sort of person Jasper thinks is almost a loser - a politician maybe, or perhaps his editor
Thanks, stnylan. There definitely is a lot of possibility going forward and I'm hoping I can take advantage of it.It is magnificent to see you take up your pen again sir, or perhaps more accurately your keyboard, and to see you exhibit your talent to some new faces. These two opening passages are wonderful work, reminding me in a sense of the opening of Into the West. So much possibility, and so much more to find out. I eagerly await that journey.
Indeed - we'll keep following that. We'll see Miss Sullivan again at some point. Patience.Uhhh - where have we heard of a gemstone before!
More miss Sullivan soon rools:
Of course it does. A couple of breaks aren't going to crack this case.Easy?
Sounds complicated to me.
Yeah, I thought of that after I wrote it. Hopefully it shows just how much none of these guys really trust the others.I think that last thought will come back and haunt him. In fact, I don't think it, I know it.
Interesting parallel here - his old pals from the force think he's only one step above being a loser, and he thinks the reporter is only one step above being a loser. I wonder what sort of person Jasper thinks is almost a loser - a politician maybe, or perhaps his editor
Well, he just took the case. He wants to get back to that, believe me. She didn't give him much of a chance either. Will she later? Wait and see.Very nice. I, too, await the return of the Miss Sullivan. Wait she's a Miss? If this was a hollywood movie, he'd done her already o.
I don't usually read murder mysteries but your work has me hooked!
Great! I appreciate that.Another fantastic update... I'm hooked and waiting for more!
Simply amazing so far!
Excellent! Thank you.Great update! You have me hook, line and sinker! KUTGW!
Thanks! Indeed, Jasper might prove a problem...though he might prove a help. We aren't done throwing some roadblocks up for Sam.Although I'm not surprised Mr. Finch is excited about having an "easy" case, I do believe drafting Mr. White into his investigation will only bring more trouble than he's worth.
Excellent Writing, as usual, Mr. coz1!
Great. I really do like writing in this style. It's fun and easier than trying to get language right in earlier generations. Though there will be chance for that here too.Good dialogue coz1. Good update overall. Catches the atmosphere of the time very well I think.
Yeah, I'm working to try and get some good shots to do that very thing so that the dialogue, pictures and description really create a mood.Well, there goes my observation . You forgot lawyers and insurance salesmen...
Great atmosphere coz. The picture really helps set the mood.
Thanks. Like I said, it's pretty fun. Hopefully I can keep it up.I am really enjiying this. I've never actually read many stories of this style so my judgement is far from expert but I think you have really got the atmosphere and characters perfect.
You may have a point. I think he's perhaps just too focused on seeing Miss Sullivan again. He'll soon realize this is no easy case. And thanks."easy case"... you know, with such a down payment and the mentioning of a gem... One would think that he'd be cautious in assuming it's an easy case...
Excellent writing, though
That sounds about right, Director. This last post pretty much flowed out, dialogue, description and all. The first post was much harder to write. And no doubt I'll need to get back to the earlier stuff soon. I don't want to lose sight of that and hopefully I can weave both seemlessly.That one's too easy - the police look down on the detective who looks down on the reporter who looks down on... the police.
The first post was good but a trifle stiff, the second very good, the third impeccable. Beautiful use of language and patterns of speech. Information carefully conveyed and withheld, keeping the readers intrigued but puzzled...
(Opens fourth wall to audience). You and I talked about this on the phone the other day, and I am delighted you're going on with it. I understand now what you meant about using the same approach Nil-the-Frogg did, with cuts back and forth between eras. Looks like it is working well, and you've got the writing chops to make it work. One caution - don't let the fun you are having with the noir era tempt you to spend too much time there. The story is in the past...
Now I need to know why I care about these characters. (closes fourth wall).
Great stuff, coz. More!
That is a possiblity. Not giving anything away just yet. We'll have to wait and see what happened to Professor West. Thanks.Noah West clearly went missing when his train was attacked by mysterious bandits in the Papal States.
Good dialogue. I'm looking forward to the treasure hunt Finch goes on now.
trueWell now, it appears that both these individuals in the past might be getting into hot water. The one because he is dying, the other becaue he wishes to become alive.
Glad to have you so hooked, comagoosie. And you are entirely correct, there will be a few hardships along the way. It'd be a pretty boring story otherwise.Easy case? Yeah right
I bet my bottom dollar that this won't be easy. I can't wait to see where this story goes and how it goes back in time! And I am most interested in seeing Mrs. Sullivan too!
That's a good question, Qorten and one I've kept close to my chest thus far. It isn't based on any ONE game but rather bits and pieces from others I've played in the past. You see, I had to buy a laptop when my CPU went down, and this one won't play EUIII anymore. The games I'd previously played kept offering me ideas here and there and I've been kind of building on them since. They finally came together when I started writing this.Is this actually based on a game? I sometimes wonder with certain AAR's. Definitely in EU3, where you have to make up a lot of things to get a real story. If it is based on a game, my guess is it's usually just the environment, the story itself has hardly anyhting to do with what happens in-game.
Excellent! That's what I was going for, certainly.
Thanks.Hmmm, mysterious indeed. Don't know what to think of it. But good writing as always.
Good parallel and one I can't explain just yet. Soon, the picture will become brighter.Well now, it appears that both these individuals in the past might be getting into hot water. The one because he is dying, the other becaue he wishes to become alive.
Something like that, though not quite. There is correlation though. I'll get there soon.true
I wonder if there is any correlation, such as the man is dying for the other to become a alive?
I don't think it is a coincidence that there is one dying and one wishing to become alive, there must be a reason, a reason probably explained in further chapters.
They all were but none enough to give me a full (and interesting) story. This hodgepodge, however, may well result in one.Human?
Whom, or what?
'U r hot', nice nice.
The eu3 game must have been interesting.
Do you think? Could be. There will be more where that came from. Certainly a connection is meant. I'll be jumping around like that often.A vampire story, eh? The hints in the first half of the chapter color the entire second half. Nom nom on our mysterious clunked-over-the-head man, which means he may live to play a part in the 1938 chapter.
Excellent. That is what I want to hear from my readers. Hopefully I can keep churning out good stuff. I admit, I feel a little rusty right now, having gone too long with little writing. The Eagle in Winter's end has come entirely too slowly and I've let a lot of readers get away through such slow times.This is certainly keeping me pacing for more and more!
I can't wait for more to come...