My ideas on the political restructuring of the checks and balances of the State are pretty different from those of others, but even though it is a minor sub-strata of what is going on might I suggest this as a rough suggestion as to the rights part of the equation?
The International Manifesto of Proletarian Rights*
The right of all human beings to the Proletarian Rights set forth in this Manifesto, without distinction of any kind, such as race, color, sex, language, religion, political opinion, national or social origin, or other status.
The right to life, freedom, and safety within the International Proletariat.
The right to the due process of law and humane carrying out of sentence.
The right of each to receive according to their need as long as they give according to their ability.
The right to free speech, free press, free association, and peaceful assembly.
The right to members of the Party to form militias, in which law abiding members of the Proletariat may peacefully bear arms, with the understanding that the sponsoring Party members are responsible for the actions of the armed Proletariat they represent.**
The right of the Proletariat and the Party Members to their respective political participation laid out elsewhere in this manifesto.
The right to freely chosen or accepted work, with just and favorable working conditions and the freedom of workers to form voluntary organizations such as trade unions beyond the organs of the workers state (such as the current Soviets).
The right to the free and voluntary establishment of families, with special protection and assistance to mothers and children.
The right to an adequate standard of living, including adequate food and housing, with the continuous improvement of living conditions.
The right to the highest attainable standard of health.
The right to an education that enables all persons to participate effectively in the proletariat.
The right to enjoy the benefits of culture, scientific progress, and recognition for one's accomplishments and contributions to the proletariat.
*essentially this is structured as an international document that will first be ratified for the VSVR by the VSVR and can then be introduced to the Comintern or not. It only applies to ratifiers anyway, so why enshrine nationalism when we can frame it as an international document?
**trying to disarm the Young Anarchist militia would just result in another civil war, but it helps to be able to hold Party members responsible for factional militias.
It includes the two visions of the evolution to Communism: the Marxist's love of constantly improving social conditions with the Anarchist's love of personal freedoms.
Hmm...I love my specific sort of UN-y human rights that I distilled here, but trying to mesh them with the broad USConstitution type rights that serve as their philosophical justification seems a bit muddled. Perhaps it needs to be separated into two parts...