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God’s Playground: France in the Revolution

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Introduction

France stands on the brink of destruction as the year 1795 marches forward to the tune of war. A noble experiment in enlightenment has caused the state to fall into the torturous grasp of war. At this vital juncture in its history, when the future of the state hangs on every action, France needs intelligent and capable leaders. The state, however, finds itself in the hands of a motley assortment of characters driven by idealism, lust, and greed. At the same to time, enemies close in from every side. The fate of the revolution has come to a head.

Game Notes – The scenario is Napoleon’s Ambition, which begins in 1795. Difficulty is set to hard and AI aggressiveness to aggressive. The AAR will be told through documents, such as letters and journals, supplemented with background on what is going on in the game.

Other – This is my first AAR, as well as my first post here. I joined the forum because I really liked reading all of the ARRs and felt like giving it a try myself. Thus, I would love suggestions on how to make a better story-thing. Also, as this is a narrative story, it might be hard to jump into the middle of. With that in mind, I hope anyone interested in reading / helping me better my work will ask question and comment on old posts.

Table of Contents

Chapter One
Chapter Two
Chapter Three
Chapter Four
Chapter Five
Chapter Six
Chapter Seven
Chapter Eight
 
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By the year 1795, the most radical stage of the French Revolution has passed. In the wake of the Reign of Terror, a period of the revolution in which heads were cut off by the hundreds, France has attained a certain level of stability. Large armies are positioned against the First Coalition, a group of nations set upon rebuking the revolutionary sprit imbued within France. A key military campaign is being held in Holland that promises to lead to the downfall of traditional power in that area. French politics, however, have reached a low point: with treachery and suspicion being as potent as reason. Despite petty squabbles among leaders, the nation stands prepared to fight its enemies.

Chapter I

Diary of Dimitri Moreau (Officer of French Armie)

January 3, 1795 – This campaign in Holland seems to drag on for an eternity. It is as if I am trapped within a frigid hell. Only duty, a concept I have come to hate, compels me to remain steadfast in my service to the army. If not for that lingering moral obligation, I would gladly abandon this campaign and flee to my beloved Alexandrine, who has likely forgotten me within the beauty of Paris.

Alas! I must continue to fight: if not for myself, then for those great principles of liberty, equality, and fraternity. Eventually, victory will be achieved. Already there are signs that the end of conflict may not be very distant. In many places, as the army moves into Dutch territory, the soldiers do not even need to lift their rifles. Though the citizens of Holland rush forth from their strongholds with weapons aloft, they do not trouble us. It seems that the Dutch have come to embrace the ideals of our French Revolution, for they strike hard against their masters once the army approaches.

This morning we began a slow march toward the city of Utrecht. General Revoues has informed me that he expects the capture of the aforementioned city by our army will serve as an expedient to the destruction of the current Dutch regime. I greeted his words with merriment and suggested that we celebrate the moment with some fine wine. Tonight I go to sleep content.

January 7, 1795 – The army arrived in Utrecht this morning. Mists hung unusually thick in the air, and I could not help but perceive a very disturbing aura of despair. Though the mists dispersed as the day wore on, that sense of despair seemed to linger in my heart. It is difficult to explain, and I believe the subject must rest for now.

In any event, the Dutch made only a token show of defense in protecting the city. General Revoues told me that most of the enemy forces in Holland are concentrated toward the north, where they defend the Stadhouder. Dutch peasants greeted us soldiers amiably at the gates of Utrecht. It is as though they perceive the army to be their key to freedom, a concept not entirely removed from truth. Tonight will surely involve much rejoicing with regards to the capture. Though I am obliged to be happy, my mind continues to dwell upon Alexandrine, who remains far removed.

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Journal of Dauphin (the would-be Louis XVII of France)​

January 11 - I am a prince who lives as a slave! Ever since this dreadful revolution began, I have been held captive by lunatics, who find themselves emboldened by a distortion of logic. Life is despair, and death will be bliss. Honestly, I know not why I write this log of my affairs. I know only that it soothes my soul to write.

Though my father was a king, I am a prisoner to radicals. They hold me captive in relative squalor. I am forced to curse my parents, may God have given them rest, and work at degrading tasks. Events of importance rarely occur. Thus, I was surprised when, yesterday, a radical guard passed a note to me in a clandestine manner.

The secret correspondence, which I was instructed to burn promptly, was little more than a slip of tattered paper. On the parchment my captor informed me tersely that some discussion has been made concerning my ultimate fate. This, I assume, means that the revolutionaries have decided it is high time to do away with me in a permanent fashion. In his letter, my guard went on to say that, if I have any means through which escape can facilitated, now is the time to exploit them. Alas! If I had an expedient to escape, I would use it in a heartbeat... A restless sleep is in my future. Perhaps, sweet death will come during the night.​
 
What an excellent beginning! And the folks were just recently inquiring about more good revolutionary France AARs. You'll certainly find a readership for this.

I like the diary approach, and the last part, with Louis...such heartbreak could be felt in those words.

Welcome to the forum and welcome to AAR writing. I truly look forward to where you go with this. Good luck! :)
 
Welcome to the forum! I hope you come to have as much fun here as the rest of us do, and that we might see you comment in some of those AARs you have been enjoying! ;)

And a great first post. Lots of potential the 1795 scenario.
 
I'm keen of following this... Both the theme and the way you approach it seem interesting. :)

As the others already said, welcome on the forum. And don't hesitate to post in those AAR's you've been / are reading : I bet you'll soon find that readers comments can fuel a writer's dedication. ;)
 
1795 scenario. Didn't see too many of those. :cool: the start is more then good. Keep it up and welcome to the forum :D
 
Hey, thanks for the feedback everyone. I've got a general question on AAR writing: how often should one update their story? Is there a certain length of time that, going beyond, will annoy people? :)
 
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The war between revolutionary France and its adversaries spans the globe. Across the seas, violent battles rage. The fate of the revolution hangs equally upon victory in Europe and victory in the far-removed corners of the world. Meanwhile, in the heart of France, political maneuverings threaten the lives of many men.

Chapter II

Captain’s Log, James McAlester (of HMS Glory)

January 15 – We encountered a strong storm off the coast of Barbados. After riding out the gale, we took in at port for provisions. While in port, I received orders and news. I am to take Glory to the north and west, where Spanish informers expect a contingent of French ships to be lurking. The crew is not pleased. They would gladly remain in port for the war’s duration. With word of French victories in Europe, however, such is not an option.

January 17 – A crew member sighted an unknown ship at midday. Cloud cover made it difficult to identify the vessel. Thus, we pursue blindly… Crew otherwise in good health. I had to discipline a man for thieving: twenty-five lashes. I would have given thirty, but mate objected on grounds of a battle being immanent.

January 19 – Ship sighted previously is most certainly French. The vessel weaves as it travels, hoping to make our pursuit and attack more difficult. My crew is anxious; they believe the ship is too powerful for us to handle. Tomorrow, we should be close enough to engage. We must be careful not to lose the French ship during the night.

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Journal of Dauphin (the would-be Louis XVII of France)

January 16 – I received another note from my guard today. He shook rather violently as he handed the paper to me; it is lucky that nobody witnessed the exchange. It is obvious that he fears for his welfare… I would act the same if our positions were reversed. Actually, I don’t believe that I would risk my life for another man… The guard really is quite bold.

In any event, the guard leads me to believe that God has not forsaken me entirely. He informs me (who he calls “your majesty”) that there are men working towards freeing me from this cell. I fear that the guard is delusional, though I hold out hope for rescue. Maybe the fires of Hell will freeze over and allow me relief from the torture of my captive existence!

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Letter, Unsigned and Unaddressed

20 January,​
Regards,

The time has come to act, for they plan to take the King’s life. The radicals wait only for some members of their Assembly to offer approval for the execution. Plan to move forward with the scheme in two days. Unless you hear otherwise from me, stay in the shadows until that point.

Godspeed - X​
 
Quintilian said:
Hey, thanks for the feedback everyone. I've got a general question on AAR writing: how often should one update their story? Is there a certain length of time that, going beyond, will annoy people? :)
There is no established rule. In fact, posting too often can be bad too, because some of your readers might not follow your rate. Once or two times a week is usually mentioned, but that's a loose recommendation.

Looks like you're in for a world war, eh? For some reason, I can't feel for the prince :D .
 
People find their own rhythms with updates. Some people update every other day, some less than once a week.

I like those little messages at the end of the update.
 
stnylan said:
People find their own rhythms with updates. Some people update every other day, some less than once a week.

I like those little messages at the end of the update.
Well, most of us have variable rate of posting, don't they? :rolleyes: Even our most esteemed demi mods. :D I mean, according to RL possibilities and motivation...
 
Yes, I like the plot element you've inserted. Should be fun.

As for posting rate, what the others have said is correct. I'd say, in the end, do what's best for you and your writing. But Nil is correct when he says posting too much can assist in keeping some readers away as they won't be able to keep up with you. Likewise, too little can make people forget about it. In the end, establishing a consitent rate (usually two to four times a week) seems to work the best both from a writing standpoint and a reading standpoint. My two (or more) ducats worth. ;)
 
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As January of 1795 rolls toward a close, France remains in a precarious position. Several great battles have occurred in Europe, with some of them being won and others lost. Holland has fallen almost entirely under the grasp of the French. The cry of revolution has been caught up by the Dutch, who gladly oppose their old rulers with a French army nearby to support them. Meanwhile, across the globe, naval skirmishes between the French and British are a sign of things to come…

Chapter III

Journal of Dauphin (the would-be Louis XVII of France)

January 22 - It seems as though hope has once again led me astray. I was fooled into a sense of optimism, only to be disappointed sorely… To explain, it seems as though my guard, the man who promised me freedom, has abandoned me to rot within this cruel pit. Several long days have passed, and he has not even appeared within my cell, never mind communicated some message of hope to me. Alas! I pray that death may take me soon…. But wait; I can hear the sound of footsteps upon the set of stairs that lead to my chamber. Yet, it is the dead of night. Who visits at such an ungodly hour?

Diary of Dimitri Moreau (Officer of French Armie)

January25 - Today, by dawn’s light, we (the army) departed from the Dutch city of Utrecht, which is now justly occupied by French troops. A contingent of soldiers has been left behind in the metropolis to ensure that the locals remain loyal to the “benevolent” state… The men are in high spirits, though I foresee trouble in the future. Supplies are not as high as they ought to be, and the officers fear that we might run short of necessities as we travel north. All the same, the Armie has orders to cut off a contingent of Prussians moving south through the Dutch-land.

My mind dwells more upon my love Alexandrine with each passing day. Her face seems to float before me at all times, a beautiful reminder of my loneliness. I have resolved that I will not endure much more of this torturous campaign. Should the Armie linger much longer in this Dutch-land, I will request leave of General Revoues. He is a kindly gentleman and a good friend; perhaps, he can be persuaded to transfer me to a command closer to Paris, where my love dwells. Oh, if only the hopes of lovers could come true!

Captain’s Log, James McAlester (of H.M.S. Glory)

January 21 (Caribbean Sea) – The fury of Hell has been set upon this poor ship for the past two days…. We pursed a French vessel deep into the night, hoping to attack the ship in the King’s name by dawn’s illumination. However, amid a heavy fog that tends to blanket the sea during the night, we lost sight of the enemy. At first light, we found our ship alone in a vast fog. Morning bore on, but the condensation would not disperse, as it normally does.

The crew took this as a bad omen and was full of apprehension. Their superstition may have been founded this time, for we soon found ourselves embroiled in a trap. The French ship, it seems, never truly left our vicinity, but merely circled around to our rear. Furthermore, the vessel rendezvoused with some other privateer craft during the night. Together, the two ships launched a surprise attack upon us: coming out of the fog like monsters. Surely, we found have been lost had the helmsman not been able to maneuver our intrepid ship deep into the fog, where we avoided capture…

This encounter leads me to believe that the Admiralty has underestimated the French military presence in the West Indies. I fear that the radicals may be planning something devious in the colonies!​