Another excellent update XD Ahh the joy of Paris, the filthiest city in all Christendom!
haha to be sure . Grand fun to write about though . Thank you again XD
Nothing wrong with a little fun, is there?!?
Comtesse de Beaulieu's first name wasn't Priscilla, by any chance? Maybe that could explain the tune Leon was humming.
Haha a nice little reference there , but I'm afraid not XD . Léon's humming should be explained rather soon , actually .
Please, divide the Chapters into smaller 'proper' AAR updates.
Although I like the text, I just spend over 20 mins reading ONE update.
Smaller and with a greater frequency, bitte?
You little devil.
Haha but I needed to tie things up thematically ! It takes quite a few pages to do that ! I'll try smaller and greater frequency but sometimes there's just a lot to complete a set ! XD Sumimasen !
The player gets played, because no-one's invincible; second half is a neat little mirror of the first.
If all you need it a mirror you don't even need the sex.
Correct , though sex will be treated in more detail coming up .
It's a really good chapter - it really has a little story of its own and links to prior and presumably consequent ones; feels very complete as an episode.
Ahh I'm so glad you can feel that unity and structure . It's why I adore your patronage !
Thing is, for all his skill Leon is himself bound by well, what I can only describe as an evil woman. Will the end of this adventure lead him to freedom? I don't know.
Indeed , a very good observation ! His own game is his prison .
Nitpicking: the word "cooed" - if there's any word that is worse in terms of ONLY occurring in bodice rippers or worse, I'd be really surprised.
ROFL my vocabulary only goes so far ! Actually I submitted this last chapter to an analysis little facebook thing and it told me that I write closest to Lovecraft . I laughed haha .
Second: chiseled without context. It's a really odd word for the 18th century, I think, to say that the person is chiseled rather than a particular part of the person - like the nose or the jaw or something. I may be wrong but it really leaps out.
I'm not sure honestly . Most of the speaking convention will be anachronistic , I suppose . Can't be helped , though this being at the height of neo-classicalism , it might fit in well enough ?
So we've got more than spirits here... a blonde haired drugged out assassin (assuming thats what the euphoria and nose rubbing was), and Leon sold his soul to "something worse than the devil?"
Himself? His obsessions? Money? The list is long and intriguing...
BY the way he deals with the Marquise, perhaps its physical pleasure itself, coupled with obsession?
not bad guesses if not right on , though obviously more is heaped into that pile aside from those . We'll see more character development with Léon soon so keep those in mind .
I am treated with two updates after my short absence! Yay! Love them both, sir, top drawer as always!
Thank you
I'm glad you're enjoying it !
Working on the update as we speak !