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What I liked about the story:
- Good and to the point action sequences. Pretty thrilling with a nice pace - quite hard to do properly. They usually tend to drag on.
- Nice and pleasant style of writing.
What I didn't like (sorry it's always easier to criticize
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- Way too much jumping around in time, especially to periods not really in the EUIV timeline. I'm not saying it shouldn't be done, but IMHO there was too much of it and took up to much of the story, especially since it had little connection story wise to the characters from the earlier parts. As an epilogue it would suffice, but I felt the story needed to focus more on Alan, Erwan and the British chap. This leads us to...
- A lack of focus. There's not always a need for a central theme, but I felt no real connection between the various sub-stories. And the ending with the nationalism just left me flabbergasted. Where did that come from?
Overall the story started out interesting enough, the style of writing kinda lured you in, then came the really interesting fun of the action sequence, and just when you were hoping for things to really heat up (a fight for where to strike next Nantes or Renne, British interests, Brittany's fight for survival/independence) it turns to the whole Moltke/Bismarck thing and things start to go downhill fast with a meh ending.The style was there, but the story just didn't go anywhere. All in all it was a good read, but I felt more of a disappointment as my expectations were higher.