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Haha we have broken Sam's will not to communicate with Jasper! Anyways, Miss Sullivan knows more than she is telling...especially with an Irish name like hers
It's quite disturbing that it's gone. But I wouldn't say it was a suprise. The Germans have some mighty resources.
It would have to be a real big thing to make Sam contact Jasper. This must count.
Quite right, coma, Irish are good at keeping secrets.... unless.... A stiff drink is in order then! Anyone for a Guinness? :rofl::rofl::rofl:
Another smashing update, coz!
Yeah, but Miss Sullivan never will take that offered drink.
Okay coz1, with regular updates you’ve convinced me to come back. I probably won’t comment again until I’ve caught up again but with your writing that shouldn’t take long.
On another note, I’d ask you to reconsider removing this AAR from the ACAs. Without it, I don’t have a EU3 narrative spot to fill.
Good to see you back, BIII. Hope the second episode works as well as the first. As for the ACAs, that's just silly.
There are plenty of other eligible and worthy AARs. Just look.
So the object has moved itself, and Otto, and left not a trace. Hmm, so careful; sounds like Sebastion...
It could be...but what if it isn't?
It really is something strange going on here… wonderful scene Coz, it really felt like scene from a typical detective novel. Very nice work, I wonder what will happen when Jasper arrives
Glad you liked that, Lord E. I enjoy writing the 1938 sections quite a lot. It's fun to "feel" the period but a little difficult not to overdue the "trappings" of the time. As for Jasper, we'll see.
Poor Sam, thither and whither his mind is running.
And the more he tries to figure everything out, the more he realises what be unknown to him.
Someone help that fellah.
Maybe it will be Jasper. :rofl: Somehow, I doubt that too. But I have some ideas of some others that might lend a hand, one of which will come around very soon. Stay tuned.
Ah, the noir cliches: the good girl Friday the hero ignores, while falling headfirst for the dangerous femme fatale. Well-written, even if it's a bit formulaic.
This, more than anything, shows that Ms. Sullivan knows a good deal more than she lets on.
The way Ms. Sullivan and Sam were circling each other, looking for a weakness, was well done. In the end, I think it was Sullivan who cracked - ever so slightly - with her comment that I quoted above.
So Sam realizes he needs Jasper. That's quite a shocker, given his stated antipathy.
Indeed, as mentioned above, I try to not be too formulaic, but certain parts of the story need to be there for the reader shorthand. If I can mix them up a bit, I'll be happy. For now, Min remains his girl Friday - exactly. And so Sullivan must be the femme fatale. I'm gonna gloss Minnie up a bit soon though, so wait for it.
I'm glad you liked the back and forth. At first, I felt that I could have shortened the scene by half, perhaps. But as I kept reading it, the lengthy back and forth seemed exactly necessary to show the probing. If only Sam were a little brighter, he might get what he needed more quickly.
But she does have him a bit flummoxed.
And indeed, it was something really big that made him make that call. If anything, Jasper is the only other person that saw what he saw.
Nice 'hard-boiled' scene. One minor nitpick...the conversation between Sam and Ms. Sullivan sounded like a conversation between two men. Far too logical and short for a woman being in the conversation.
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I wrote her that way on purpose. At least, I wanted to change her action a bit from the first scene, especially since we'd already had an office scene between the two of them. I did not consider so much manly as forceful - not interested in beating around the bush while showing she was perhaps more intelligent that Sam. Biting too. Plus, we must consider what type of woman Sullivan is? Dare I wonder if she is even human? It
is always dark when we see her.
Now I've said too much again.
To all - the week has caught up with me again which means no update until the weekend probably. I hope to get some writing in finally so we'll see how it goes. Thanks for the comments and keep them coming.