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Well I missed that update til now. Glad I caught it though, very interesting to see where this leads. So we have some supernatural being on the lookout for this jewel? I wonder how this will work out.
Also, it really does say something of your skill as a writer that you can write in several distinct styles. And write each of them well too, I might add.
Yeah, I am trying to make sure each section is "in its element" as much as possible. Not sure how it will work to jump from style to style. Thanks for the compliment.
Vampires! The meaning of the name of this AAR is coming clearer. This is a stone well worth keeping under wraps. It is interesting that they should be the subject of your story for I am currently reading Dracula and enjoying it a lot. I hope that we see a visit to Wallachia at some point. Those are my favourite bits of Dracula.
That's a great book (though not as good as Mary Shelley's Frankenstein.) I haven't decided if I want to go the full route of "scary castle, etc." because I don't want to get too typical, but there will be some creepy moments, I hope.
Two parallel universes both searching for the gem of the dragon. I think I am starting to see this unfold.
Mr. Knox, could that be...the first secretary of war...
Indeed that is Secretary Knox, a man that fascinates me. He is one of the men I've wanted to write for as I've played certain games. I think I may have found a place for him here so be on the look out. he may play a larger role.
Vampires? AHHHHHHHHH! Well, this is getting better and more interesting with every word read!
Indeed. Great to hear!
Yikes! Vampires, this is definatley going to have a bad effect on one of the characters or more down the road.
So Constantinople (Thrace) fell in 1582 in your game. The Byzantines must have put up a decent comeback and fight with the Ottomans then. Out of curiousity, who are the major powers in Europe? How big is the OE and Austria?
Another fabulous update!
Yes, it fell but to the Austrians. The Turks had beat Byzantium early on and had moved up through the Balkans. The major powers from that game, IIRC were your typical powers - England, France, Spain & Austria (having bit a healthy chunk out of Germany.) The OE and Austria were about even.
So now is a time for a little plain speaking - well, perhaps not plain speaking. I doubt the truth of a great deal of what we have been told, since as a famous man once said truth must be protected by a bodyguard of lies.
I also cannot help but think in this latest passage we have not seen innocence lost. Mr Franklin is the innocent of course, before this meeting he had no idea of the vampire, or anything like that. Now Abraham has introduced him to that ... and he can never go back to his blissfully ignorant state. And also, in the last line. Abraham answers immediately, seemingly heartfelt. Here is truly innocence already lost, and grieving perhaps still for a time when he still possessed it.
That is an interesting thought, stnylan. I have structured this as I have to give some parallels between posts, particularly with Abraham who's story we are still learning. As for Franklin, indeed, he is learning something new and will continue to do so. There is another person I've wanted to structure a story around. Let's see how he does.
Heh, vampires. Nothing else comes from Wallachia. Or Siebenbürgen. Nor Transylvania. Good that they left at least Dacia and Moldavia alone.
Another latin crusade to Konstantinople?
Shameful!
But nice narrative as allways. Where has this man met one of those?
We'll get to that, believe me. I couldn't leave a last line like that and never explain it. That would just be wrong.
The time frames deployed here are unclear. I get the feeling that we are working out way backwards? The vampire angle hinted at in the previous chapter is confirmed, nice, and I am glad I detected the Benjamin Franklin hint before it was made absolutely explicit. ;-) Good dialogue, very natural and entertaining, and very cool to see the absolute faith Temple has in his ancestor.
I agree, it must be a little confusing to place each bit with the other this early on. Hopefully it spurs the reader to want to find out and keep reading rather than turning them off. There is definitely some backwards action because I don't want to just dump information in the first post. I'd think it's a bit more pleasing and artistic this way. We'll see how effective it is as the story continues.