Sharpening up some ideological language.

[LM+]

I've always been a little disappointed by the bland - and sometimes unintelligible - text of the ideological inventions one gets after researching "Ideological Thought". So I've rewritten the liberal ones.

To say the least, this is not an easy task to get even halfway right. Talk to ten people, and one will get at least that many opinions on these matters! So I post my changes for your consideration. If enough folks give me encouragement, I'll have a fist at the conservative and socialist inventions, although I confess I don't have so natural a feeling for them.

Customized pictures would also be nice.


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#########################################################################
# Constitutionalism
#########################################################################
event = {
id = 438
random = no
invention = yes

trigger = {
technology = 4302
OR = {
government = { type = liberal }
government = { type = anarcho_liberal }
}
}

name = "EVT_438_NAME"
desc = "Throughout history, the most powerful people in government had no effective checks on their conduct save moral sanction and the threat of physical force. Humanity now has an alternative to this ancient rule of the club and the taboo: A set of written rules governing law-makers, law-judgers, and law-enforcers, guarded and made effective by the ruler, autonomous powers in government, independant institutions, and by the whole people."
style = 0

Originally:
"Constitutionalism is a constitutional system of government, usually with a written constitution. It advocates that all actions taken by the government must be in accordance with constitutional principles."


date = { day = 4 month = january year = 1836 }
offset = 58
deathdate = { day = 30 month = december year = 1920 }

action_a = {
name = "Government under the law."
command = { type = plurality value = 5 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = capitalists value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = clerks value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = craftsmen value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_ideology which = 5 value = liberal }
}
}
#########################################################################
# Individualism
#########################################################################
event = {
id = 439
random = no
invention = yes

trigger = {
technology = 4302
OR = {
government = { type = liberal }
government = { type = anarcho_liberal }
}
}

name = "EVT_439_NAME"
desc = "At most times and in most places, the will of the people or of their leaders have outweighed any claims of non-elite individuals to intellectual freedom, personal dignity, independant initiative, or economic opportunity. Only now is there a sense that the whole nation benefits from the individual self-assertion of even the poorest or least vocal. We have entered the age of the morally autonomous human individual, responsible for his or her own pursuit of virtue and happiness."
style = 0

Originally:
"Individualism is the belief in the importance of the individual and the virtue of self-reliance and personal independence. This doctrine also states that the government should not interfere in commercial affairs."

date = { day = 5 month = january year = 1836 }
offset = 58
deathdate = { day = 30 month = december year = 1920 }

action_a = {
name = "Individual power, individual responsibility."
command = { type = plurality value = 5 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = capitalists value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = clerks value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = craftsmen value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_ideology which = 5 value = liberal }
}
}
#########################################################################
# Rationalism
#########################################################################
event = {
id = 440
random = no
invention = yes

trigger = {
technology = 4302
OR = {
government = { type = liberal }
government = { type = anarcho_liberal }
}
}

name = "EVT_440_NAME"
desc = "Even the most firmly-rooted religions and governments are now subject to critiques based on reason, analysis based on logic. Authority, revelation, tradition; all are under attack, and our culture is becoming one forged by the thrust-and-parry of argument, and the evidence of practical experience."
style = 0

Originally:
"Rationalism is the theological doctrine that human reason rather than divine revelation establishes religious truth. This doctrine states that knowledge is acquired by reason without resort to experience."

date = { day = 6 month = january year = 1836 }
offset = 58
deathdate = { day = 30 month = december year = 1920 }

action_a = {
name = "The unexamined life is not worth living."
command = { type = plurality value = 5 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = capitalists value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = clerks value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = craftsmen value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_ideology which = 5 value = liberal }
}
}
#########################################################################
# Secularization
#########################################################################
event = {
id = 441
random = no
invention = yes

trigger = {
technology = 4302
OR = {
government = { type = liberal }
government = { type = anarcho_liberal }
}
}

name = "EVT_441_NAME"
desc = "Our government, economy, culture, and places of learning are divorcing themselves from religious influence and control. Government is increasingly required not to meddle in matters of worship, and clergymen expected to be apolitical. Property and public culture are passing into the hands of laymen, the laws favoring an established Church are under attack, and ecclesiastics no longer have a monopoly on childhood education."
style = 0

Originally:
"Secularization is the activity of changing something like art or education so it is no longer under the control or influence of religion. This doctrine also proposes the transfer of property from ecclesiastical to civil possession."

date = { day = 7 month = january year = 1836 }
offset = 58
deathdate = { day = 30 month = december year = 1920 }

action_a = {
name = "Freedom of conscience, limits to the Church."
command = { type = plurality value = 5 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = capitalists value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = clerks value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = craftsmen value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_ideology which = 5 value = liberal }
}
}
#########################################################################
# Social Contract - this was originally "Social Conscience"
#########################################################################
event = {
id = 442
random = no
invention = yes

trigger = {
technology = 4302
OR = {
government = { type = liberal }
government = { type = anarcho_liberal }
}
}

name = "Social Contract"
desc = "Why have we banded together to form a nation and unite ourselves under a common administration? What powers should we loan to that government to exercise on our behalf? What rights and freedoms do we retain to ourselves, forbidding any state to take them from us? To ask these questions is to conceive, not of government-as-divine, or govenment-as-rulership, but of government-as-contract."
style = 0

Originally:
"Social Conscience is motivation deriving logically from ethical or moral principles that govern a societies as well as individuals thoughts and actions."

date = { day = 8 month = january year = 1836 }
offset = 58
deathdate = { day = 30 month = december year = 1920 }

action_a = {
name = "From the people, the power."
command = { type = plurality value = 5 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = capitalists value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = clerks value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_consciousness which = craftsmen value = 1 }
command = { type = pop_ideology which = 5 value = liberal }
}
}

 

[Symmetry]

Bravo, those write-ups are all obviously far better than the origonal ones.

The only thing I would change is the phrase "guarded and made effective by the ruler" under constitutionalism. It sounds like its the sole responsability of the rulers to punish themselves when constitutional rules are broken.

 

[unmerged(35361)]

Looks like good work. Quite a lot of the ingame event text needs reworking and yours seem like a big improvement. While I'm here when does your AAR start?

 

[LM+]

Bravo, those write-ups are all obviously far better than the origonal ones.

The only thing I would change is the phrase "guarded and made effective by the ruler" under constitutionalism. It sounds like its the sole responsability of the rulers to punish themselves when constitutional rules are broken.

Works for me. Change made.

Another change: In "Social Contract", changed "take them from us" to "take from us".

Looks like good work. Quite a lot of the ingame event text needs reworking and yours seem like a big improvement. While I'm here when does your AAR start?

Thanks.

As you can see from my avatar, it's coming pretty soon. This weekend in fact. Right now, I'm doing preparation work like tweaking pictures and event text, finding bugs, insisting upon the proper spelling of Mexico, and whatnot.

 

[King of Men]

Excellent work LM+, those event texts have been a thorn in my side for a long time now. Hope it gets put in the next patch - I'll add it to the wishlist.