So I came across a piece of writing that should be changed depending on certain conditions. When I'm romancing somebody, one of the dialogs says "When (person being romanced) spouse (their spouse) suggested a hunt, I did not hesitate to organize one.". Normally, that's fine, but it should be changed when you're romancing your own spouse. It doesn't make sense for you to be talking about yourself in the third person for one half the sentence, then in first person in the next half of the sentence. Instead it could say, "To get a glimpse of my dearest, I decided to organize a hunt" or something like that. Attached is a screenshot so you can see what I'm talking about.
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