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Today, I name my beloved son, the newborn light of my life. I pray to Adonai with the love and the terror of a father. I pray for my son, my only son still living. May he be healthy in his years. May he never suffer from the fever that still haunts my nightmares. I beg, Adonai, as not but a desperate parent. My rank, I know, means nothing to you, Melech Malchei Ha-M'lachim, as it should be. All I pray for is peace and happiness and love, forever, and to the end of my son's days. I expect not the granting of such a boon. I merely hope it is heard.

Cry, Chavakuk. Cry with your newborn lungs, and live. I, Törtogul the First, Melech ha-M'lachim of the Khazars, will pledge my life, in the service of Adonai, to protect yours.

Milia, my beloved. Follow me in my prayer.

Baruch atta Adonai eloheinu melekh ha'olam, she-echeyanu ve'qi'eh'manu va'higiy'anu laz'man hazeh.

**********



It was Isaac the Old who had conquered the rough ground that Törtugul, on his way to the capital, was now riding past. The century-dead Turkic Khazar had blazed a path of victory through Alania and Derbent, rescuing the twice-ruined vestige of Itil from subjugation and sorrowful tales.

Isaac's son, Blush the Theologian, followed. He was a wise man, wiser than even his father, and he breathed life into Khazaria again. Khwarizm was taken. A kingdom was reborn, like a kerkes, unfolding its wings from a fiery tree.

Then, Törtugul's esteemed father of his father, Pulad the Great. He set his gaze on Azerbaijan, and Trebizond, and was given both. Constantinople, the Second Rome, was taken in the midst of a rioting Byzantine Empire. With the efforts of a brilliant rabbi, the city's people turned Jewish en masse. Pulad's name still rings in the Hagia Sophia five times a month - a murmer of power among prostrate men and women.

Törtugul's father, Sirçan (yet without an epithet, sadly) had died five months ago, two years past three score of age, having founded an empire. Curiously, he had been a dwarf. Pulad's first wife had been a dwarf, as well. Neither of them were hindered by their condition, and both of them had taken the Khazar Empire (or Khaganate, if one preferred) to great heights.

The Khazars stretched from the Aral to the Black Sea, now, sandwiched between Muslims and Pagans and struggling Orthodox Christians. They persevered, however. Jews were skilled at that.

Such was what led Törtugul across Kuma to Itil, to convene a council. The Golovins, under tribal, Bogomilist rule, were ripe for conquest. The Khazar holdings in Moldau would make such a move trivial, and Wallachia shared a small, but crucial border with the Duchy of Rashka. Surrounding Nicaea's holdings in Greece would be a great boon, and Törtugul knew the council would support the endeavor. He glanced at his wife, riding beside him.

Malcah ha-M'lachim Milia Jimena was the most beautiful and charming woman Törtugul had ever had HaShem's fortune to gaze upon. Her heavy locks of hair fell down to the bejeweled royal vest on her chest, and her deep brown eyes penetrated through men and women's souls alike. She glanced back, smiling that loving half-smile that Törtugul had loved for years.

“Do you wish to take Hellas, my love?” She muttered, to hide her words from the iron-plated, stern guards that surrounded the royal couple. Her husband answered with the pensive slowness that characterized him.

“It is likely, though I remain somewhat undecided. The land is rich and promising, but its acquisition could raise yet more angry voices in the west.” Europe had calmed its views on Judaism considerably since the building of the great Khazar Empire, but Törtugul could still hear the hidden presumption and tinges of fear and hatred in the diplomatic letters of the great kings. He hoped every day that the successful crusades of Jerusalem and Egypt, from years past, would not lead an emboldened Pope to declare holy war on a burgeoning Jewish empire.

“The west will do nothing,” Milia said. “Even as we speak, the Roman Emperor squabbles for renewed control of Germany. The Fraticellis have fractured the great state.” Törtugul conceded the point. He vaguely remembered the existence of several heretical men ruling the large state, more than twenty years back, when the newly crowned Khazar had still been taught by his short, greying father.

Perhaps it was near time to take Hellas. After the loss of great Constantinople to Pulad, the Byzantines had renamed their once great Roman successor state to Nicaea. They still warred between each other, from time to time. Men could be stubborn in their failings.

Törtugul sighed in thought, riding on to convince a council, and visit his infant son.

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What are the de jure boundaries of the Khazar Empire in CK2+, or did you mod it in?

While you are at it, could you show us a religious map? I'm interested to see if many places besides Constantinople have embraced Judaism.
 

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What are the de jure boundaries of the Khazar Empire in CK2+, or did you mod it in?

While you are at it, could you show us a religious map? I'm interested to see if many places besides Constantinople have embraced Judaism.

Yeah, Empires in CK2+ that are de jure include only the HRE and Byzantine Empire. All others are titular, named after the culture of your country - You need a realm size of 150, and a deal of prestige (and I think a bit of piety).

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The yellow is Jewish, of course.
The dark spots in the HRE are Fraticellis.
The light blue is the Lollard heresy.
That red in Russia is Nestorian. A Rurikovich duke rules over that spot. He must have been converted to Nestorianism at some point.
The dark purple (in Italy, Sweden, etc.) is the Waldensian heresy.
The light purple in France is Catharism.
The dark pink in Russia and Anatolia is Monothelitism.
That spot of light pink in Russia, above the Tengris, is Iconoclasty.

There's also a scattering of Muslim heresies, such as Druze, Salafi, Ibadi, and Zaydi in Persia. The northern part of the Horn of Africa is Mu'tazilite, which is kinda cool, in my opinion.

The Jewish Kingdom of Semien, another CK2+ kingdom to the west of the Horn of Africa, was conquered by the Abyssinians and converted to Miaphysitism quite quickly. There's still probably a member or two of the Zadokid dynasty in my court somewhere, but I've got other goals in mind that take precedence over reconquering the place.

A Jewish AAR :D. I love the ck2+ jewish rulers. Are you gonna become the head of the Jewish Religion. Create the kingdom of Israel.

I don't think I can become a Jewish head of religion in CK2+, unless I'm missing something. I'm undecided on Israel. If I do decide to go for it, it'll be a long-term goal more than anything else. More dangerous things are coming up soon, considering my position...
 

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Chapter 2:

On the sixteenth day of the third month of AM 4969, due to both council procrastination and cautious preparation, Melech ha-M'lachim Törtugul I invaded Wallachia.

It was Sar Etrek of Neopol, the Khazar Empire's brilliant and gonorrhea-infested general who led the charge, flanking the major Wallachian army as it attempted to besiege Belgorod. He defeated them with ease, reportedly scratching himself with vigour as he yelled the battle cries. The Wallachians routed, were chased to Birlad, and destroyed to a man.

During the conquest, a revolt had arisen in Azerbaijan, ten thousand souls strong, the largest ever yet seen in the Jewish world. An army was assembled, with blood to be spilled.

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*******

Fezlun, son of Fedun, smiled as Kapalak was taken with a rabble Sunnite army that made up for in numbers what it had in inexperience. The pillage of the prosperous mountain town continued for days, with an exuberance that came from people coerced into rage.

The killings began with a tax collector, as killings so often seemed to. He had pushed just a bit too hard on an embittered family near the outskirts of Castle Urmiah, threatened homelessness just one too many times. His head was caved in with a father's farming trowel, cut off, and shown on a pike to the greedy man's now long-dead children and recently-dead wife, who was raped. By Fezlun, of course; it was their fault for loving the man that bloodied Fezlun's trowel.

All the impetus ten thousand men of Azerbaijan needed was found there, in that wealthy home of a sudden widow, screaming, keening a foretelling of death.

Fezlun grinned. He gazed around for an unoccupied woman to imitate his deeds with. Then another, and another.

Later, after storming the synagogue of Takht-e Suleiman, he noticed the clouds of dust billowing five miles outside the conquered walls, and the carrion crows preparing to descend upon a wailing town. He grew very afraid, and began to pray.

*******

Princess Sirin, daughter of Törtugul, princess of the Khazars, stood on a ship traveling from Imretia to Sicily, to be married to a king. It tossed and turned on light but insistent waves, and Sirin had to struggle to control seasickness. She grabbed ahold of the pole mast, and closed her eyes.

Arnald II was said to be a noble and smart man, ruling rich and prestigious land. Yet Sirin could not help but feel a piercing grief, a shallow cut in her soul, as she left the only country she had ever lived in. The princess already missed her sisters, Yasar and Ilkay, as petty and irritable as they often were. She even missed little Chavakuk, the coddled infant heir to the Khazar throne.

Sirin decided, as soon as she stepped on the creaky little transport vessel, that she would make sure Arnald would treat her as a lady befitting her station. It was only fair, after all. She was royalty.

*******

“The siege was lifted, my lord. Three thousand men were lost, but near to four thousand of the rabble were killed as well.” Tolun Doganin, Aluf of Azerbaijan and Royal Chancellor to Melech ha-M'lachim Törtugul, lowered his eyes in the presence of such an august figure. A former bastard, he would not have been remiss in lying prostrate.

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Törtugul preferred not to be overly heavy on protocol, however. He was an emperor, and he could afford to be a nice one. For now, at least.

“Who incited this attack?” Törtugul asked.

“A peasant. Fezlun was his name.” Tolun's eyes, kept firm on the emperor's feet, flashed in rage. “He had killed a tax collector named Kopti Caffid, and done terrible, depraved things to his family.”

Törtugul, despite the grave situation, had to repress a smile. His beloved Milia had told him of Tolun's eccentricities in the bedroom. She was all too skilled at unweaving truth from gossip, told between the maids and cooks of the nobility.

He was struck with a thought.

“What was done to him?” Törtugul asked. Tolun responded with speed, and evident relish.

“He was flayed alive, and torn between two running horses,” Tolun said. “As is the custom for murderers not of our faith.”

Törtugul blinked. “Of course,” the emperor murmered, as he reached for his glass of watered Bordeaux wine. “Of course.”


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(Author's Note: How's my style, so far? Am I skimping on pictures, going overboard on textual detail, or being a bit too graphic for any of my reader's tastes? Is there anything annoying about how I write? Feedback would be appreciated.)
 
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(Author's Note: How's my style, so far?)
Pretty good, except that gonorrhea-infested has a hyphen.

Also, fanservice demands you post a map of the religion boundaries at least once every three posts (doesn't have to be as panoramic as the action screenshots).
 

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It's great. I like copious screenshots, and Llywelyn's idea is nice as well, but your narrative is clear. Perhaps a screenshot per story chunk? A shot of who Princess Sirin is marrying will tell us where she is going, who is marrying a Khazar princess and where she is headed to. All of that adds to the story.
 

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Omen said:
It's great. I like copious screenshots, and Llywelyn's idea is nice as well, but your narrative is clear. Perhaps a screenshot per story chunk? A shot of who Princess Sirin is marrying will tell us where she is going, who is marrying a Khazar princess and where she is headed to. All of that adds to the story.

I want to focus on my narrative to tell the story, improving upon it any way I can. Screenshots are of secondary importance. As of now, I'll use pictures if I want to really emphasize certain characters and events, or if I want to include some visual references (Maps, etc.)

Here's a short chapter, to illustrate what I mean.

Chapter 3:

Sirin stared at the apse mosaic in the Cathedral of Cefalú, stunned by contrasts. Upon stepping off of her ship, the princess had first thought she was entering some sort of badly placed fortress town. The sturdy church towered over the small village of Celafú, seeming to threaten the arcadian feel covering the sleepy residences and bakeries and small, creaky fisherman's port. Walkways and occasional crenellations ran across the top walls. A great deal of guards were posted there, but Sirin knew why. The king was to be married, after all. Great occasions require great security.

The inside of the fortified holy building was much more expressive. An image of Christ, rendered in the eastern style as Christ Pantokrator, lay in the apse of the chancel. A weathered man, his face lined, in the midst of Benediction. It had nearly knocked Sirin to her feet when she entered. There was a pain in Christ Pantokrator's eyes, a pain that transcended the stoicism of his features.

Sirin remembered that her teachings had emphasized, rather directly, that Jesus was a false messiah. She tried to tear her eyes from the image, after that.

The priest, an overweight man with a rich robe and trimmed beard, began the ceremony. Seventy men and women sat in the pews, all nobility, all with a vested interest in proceedings. The princess looked at the man she was to marry.

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Arnald was a sleek, athletic young king. Sirin noted the charming light blue eyes, and the alacrity with which they glanced around the room. His warm smile was feigned, but not by very much. A marriage would be exciting for a man not past his eighteenth birthday, Sirin supposed. Her heart was certainly pounding.

The priest asked if His Highness was ready to kiss the bride. He was, and Sirin found that His Highness was quite liberal with His tongue. He pulled back, and winked in amusement as the crowd cheered.

As he gazed back at the crowd and raised his arms in approbation, Sirin caught a glimpse of an exhaustion in the man – of a weathered face, and pained eyes. Sirin, startled, thought of a mosaic, and false messiahs.

*

Wallachia was conquered in May, AM 4970. It would have been conquered faster and more directly, Törtugul thought, if not for the rebels. (A shame, he had wrote, in his diary. Thousands of lives lost, all due to fear.) The High Chief of the region, a timid thirteen year old, had fled to Muslim lands.

The lands of Wallachia were divided between many members of Khazarian courts, with an Ethiopian named Amare made Aluf of the area. Törtugul's brothers and half-brothers were sent to synagogues.

This was extremely unorthodox. Ever since the days of Isaac the Old, vassals had been purely Doganin in heritage. A son of a foreigner - a lowborn peasant, even! - would have been laughed out the council and likely murdered had he suggested being Aluf. Törtugul was not a man of tradition. His unconventional views had been inherited from his father, the learned dwarf poet-emperor, who had lost an arm.

The Emperor of the Khazars closed his weary eyes, settling on a pillow in his chambers. More conquests would follow, Törtugul knew, and with them would come more questionable actions. The Jews would demand it, as a salve to soothe the centuries of oppression. Perhaps it was only fair. Perhaps it wasn't. Törtugul doubted he'd ever be the one to know.

He called for his wife. A kingdom was to be formed, and a woman's touch was always helpful for delicate situations.
 

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I enjoyed this immensely. You really seem to have the beginnings of a fantastic tale here. Your imagery is very evocative and the way you take into account details like the wider perception of the nascent Jewish empire are fantastic touches. Will there ever be a conclusion?
 

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I'm really enjoying what you have so far. I like the way you used the picture as an aid when describig Arnald.

Also , I do not agree with frequest postings of the religious map. At least in my experience, religion doesn't change as fast as one would want.