History of the White Eagle - Poland - Megacampaign AAR - part 2 EU3

[gigau]

So how is the conversion going... when do we get an update ? We wantssssss it

 

[TheExecuter]

Grammar check:

Kingdom of Greece was one of the most significant successor states of Eastern Roman Empire.

During XIth and XIIth centuries, Empire faced hard pressure from the aggressive and powerful Seljuk Sultanate. Emperors managed to hold their land in Asia Minor, partly thanks to Frankish crusaders that were constantly engaged in wars with Turks over the Holy Land. Unfortunately, latter part of XIIth century brought decline of Imperial power, as whole southern Greece fallen to Cyrenaican invaders (1176-1182). This defeat was further exploited by Seljuk Sultans, that conquered most of Byzantine lands in Asia Minor (1181-1188), and Europe (1189-1197). Finally, Empire cased to exist in year 1220, it`s territory partitioned between Seljuks, Cyrenaica, and Serbia. Greeks spent whole next century under Muslim occupation. During that period Seljuks and Cyrenaicans tried to convert their new subjects to Islam, but with only limited success. There was also significant influx of Turkic population into Asia Minor, but apart from eastern part of the region, they gained majority only in the former Byzantine 'Themes' of Paphlagonia and Bukellarion (both, merged provinces renamed to Kastamonu by Seljuks).

However, beginning of XIVth century saw slow decline of Seljuk power, as they were loosing wars with Crusaders, Hungarians, and Mongols. Finally Greek nobles from Macedonia, Thessalonice, Bursa and Aegean Islands successfully rebelled against weakened Turks. Newly proclaimed kingdom resembled Byzantine Empire of the past, as kings were elected by highest nobles among themselves.

Kingdom gradually expanded during next century in two directions. They fought for Peloponnese with Emirs of Athenes (descendant state of Cyrenaica), and with Seljuks in Asia Minor. Political system of orthodox realm, with extensive privileges of nobles, was very tempting for Greek nobility outside it. They greatly helped kingdom of 'Hellas' in it`s wars, revolting against their enemies in the right time. Unfortunately, many Byzantine lands held by weakening Muslims were taken by two catholic naval powers from Italy. Venice took Morea, Epirus and some Aegean islands, while Norman kingdom of Naples - Crete, Cyprus, but most of all Thrace with Constantinople.

In year 1475 Greek kings were powerful monarchs in the regions, with strong army and navy, however, their power had to be shared with nobles. They were also, more often with each passing year, expressing their claims over former Byzantine territories, which brought hostility in relations with kings of Naples and Venetian Doges. There were also attempts to incorporate minor Greek principalities from Asia Minor by a diplomatic means, but without success. Would this Greek noble republic proclaim new 'Roman Empire' in the future was unknown at this point in history.

This section could be written as the following:


The Kingdom of Greece was one of the most significant successor states of the Eastern Roman Empire.

During the XIth and XIIth centuries, the Empire faced hard pressure from the aggressive and powerful Seljuk Sultanate. Emperors managed to hold their land in Asia Minor, partly thanks to Frankish crusaders who were constantly engaged in wars with the Turks over the Holy Land. Unfortunately, the latter part of XIIth century brought a decline of Imperial power, as the whole of southern Greece fell to Cyrenaican invaders (1176-1182). This defeat was further exploited by the Seljuk Sultans, who conquered most of the Byzantine lands in Asia Minor (1181-1188) and Europe (1189-1197). Finally, the Empire ceased to exist in the year 1220, its territory partitioned between Seljuks, Cyrenaica, and Serbia. The Greeks spent all of the next century under Muslim occupation. During that period the Seljuks and Cyrenaicans tried to convert their new subjects to Islam with only limited success. There was also a significant influx of Turkic population into Asia Minor; but apart from eastern part of the region, they gained majority only in the former Byzantine 'Themes' of Paphlagonia and Bukellarion (both, merged provinces renamed to Kastamonu by Seljuks).

However, the beginning of the XIVth century saw a slow decline of Seljuk power, as they were loosing wars with Crusaders, Hungarians, and Mongols. Finally Greek nobles from Macedonia, Thessalonice, Bursa and the Aegean Islands successfully rebelled against the weakened Turks. The newly proclaimed kingdom resembled the Byzantine Empire of the past, as kings were elected by the highest nobles among themselves.

As you can see, most of the 'the' problem happens when you have a singular or plural noun that refers to a particular member of a group. In that case, the noun ought to be preceded by the 'the'.

For example: The cat is on the black mat.

An indefinite article (a or an) is used before singular nouns that refer to any member of a group.

For example: A cat is a mammal.

Also:

The article 'the' is used in English as the very first part of a noun phrase.

For example: The end of time begins now.

Here "the end of time" is a noun phrase. The use of 'the' signals that the reference is to a specific and unique instance of the concept (such as person, object, or idea) expressed in the noun phrase. Here, the implication is that there is one end of time, and that it has arrived.

Another example: The time is 3:29 PM.

There are many times, but the meaning here is the time now, of which (at the moment the sentence was produced) there is only one.

Hope this helps! If not, let me know and I'll try to help in some other way...
TheExecuter

 

[unmerged(59077)]

Definite article, waste of space. Save yourself from carpal tunnel, ignore it

 

[unmerged(63836)]

Alojzy - Sure - I`ll give you link. But just 'save file' won`t be enough. You`ll have to install whole new mod of mine, as there is lot of new countries, graphical files (new CoA), localization files and events added.

Duke of Wellington, jeffg006 - Thank you guys. I`ll try to improve my 'screenshot reworking' technique however. Thanks for dropping by Jeffg006 - I`ll have to check your Chinese AAR - Vicky forums are going through some kind of renaissance of good AARs lately.

Cloudyvortex - Thank you sir. You know, in fact I have perfect knowledge of English, and i`m making all those mistakes on purpose (just don`t tell anyone)

gigau - All provinces converted, now only events, CoAs, and diplomacy left me. I`ll finish it in a few days.

TheExecuter AAARGH! I didn`t know that it`s that bad with my 'the' case . Thank you for your help good sir! I`ve deeply analised everything you wrote, bookmarked your post, and most of all I think I finally get it. Hopefully I would improve next time.

RGB - No worries, I will compensate time lost on writing definite articles by not including any graphics in updates at all

 

[Nikolai]

Do not despair thrash. You don't write that bad at all. Yes, you lack a few articles, but reading your aar so far have been a great joy, and the grammar errors are not overshadowing your story. A better grammer wouldn't hurt of course, but don't stress.

 

[gigau]

I fail to undertand what that big point made about the articles. Your AAR is clear enough, it's great, it's well illustrated.... one of my favourite AAR so far.

Thrashing Mad, don't mind those remarks

 

[Nikolai]

Yep. One of the best on the board.

 

[TheExecuter]

TheExecuter AAARGH! I didn`t know that it`s that bad with my 'the' case . Thank you for your help good sir! I`ve deeply analised everything you wrote, bookmarked your post, and most of all I think I finally get it. Hopefully I would improve next time.

Hey, man...no worries! I have a lot of respect for folks who are willing to write in a non-native language. Proper article use in English is one of those difficult things...even for native speakers. Keep up the good work! I've been eagerly awaiting the roll-out of the actual EU3 game-play...looks like I won't have much time to wait.

TheExecuter

 

[Legolas]

I second what TheExecuter said. And next time you get worried about not being able to write every definite article correctly, try to think of the pains native English speakers would have if they tried to grasp the inflection systems in our languages

 

[Emperor_krk]

The problem with your use (or, lack thereof in most cases ) of definite articles doesn't make your AAR illegible or even hard to understand - it's steal clear, neat, interesting, greatly illustrated (huge emphasis on that one, but please - don't ever think this is the only factor attracting readers, like myself, to your AAR) and really fun to follow. The amount of responses and number of views to this thread speaks alone for itself. So don't worry .

 

[GrimPagan]

Would love to post the "Grammatik macht frei" image, but it has a swastika.

 

[unmerged(71032)]

The problem with your use (or, lack thereof in most cases ) of definite articles doesn't make your AAR illegible or even hard to understand - it's steal clear, neat, interesting, greatly illustrated (huge emphasis on that one, but please - don't ever think this is the only factor attracting readers, like myself, to your AAR) and really fun to follow. The amount of responses and number of views to this thread speaks alone for itself. So don't worry .

Got to agree.

At least the Crusader Kings was fantastic because... from time to time he was losing, and losing bad. For good story you need up and downs, not just "bam, country X started then conquered whole world, the end, now watch my fantastic, unique and never before published screenshots". :rofl:

This AAR is just great alternative story - maybe not the storyline masterpiece like my favourite Mettermrck "The United States: 'Advantages without Obligations'" with full alternative storyline of USA watching itself in dark mirror, but defiently as much working on imagination though the interesting characters of the kings. Keep it up.

 

[unmerged(63836)]

Thanks for praise guys! Nevertheless I`ll do my best to write in more proper English. I think that I`m able to learn - just compare my early CK updates to those I`ve made recently. And yes - i`m not great writer nor historian (just maybe decent gfx/video editor), but i`ll do my best to keep this AAR entertaining.

I`ve almost finished converting process, and I`ll post new update regarding economy/demography (mostly maps - don`t worry), and then I`ll play game and resume regular AARing (yeah you`re tired of those overviews). Small preview of next update, political map of whole Europe.

Clothes of those people on left and right actually suggests XVI-XVII centuries, but I thought that such stylized map looks cool.

 

[Emperor_krk]

Looks - as usual - great .
And good to hear that the actual AAR will continue soonish - I wouldn't say that I'm tired with the overviews, 'cos they are entertaining, but I feel a need to hear what is happening in Poland after 1475.

 

[unmerged(59077)]

That map - you've really outdone yourself this time! Wow!

 

[Woody Man]

That is an unbelievably beautiful map!

 

[canonized]

Best map I've seen on the forum ever o.o wow .

 

[gigau]

Wow... this map is just awesome !

Could you upload an empty map, for a personnal use, please ?

 

[unmerged(81390)]

Clothes of those people on left and right actually suggests XVI-XVII centuries, but I thought that such stylized map looks cool.

It does!

Thank you!

 

[gooy]

wow cool map nicely stylized and fortunately the geographic information itself isn't stylized, coz maps of that period were pretty much inaccurate
can't wait for the next update