Thank you, Coz! And I certainly don't doubt Suvarov's story is probably longer, without so much chatter (over the years!) as this one.coz1 said:In regards to your feedback, you may have more pages, but I am thinking Suv had a bit more story in his 13 pages. Of course, the problem with that AAR was that he never actually got the game off the ground so a nearly impeccable forward is flawed by the lack of actual story to follow. Oh well.
But as for your own story, given time, you will surely move past the above. And in the scene you've just given us, I am smiling as I see the picture of the boats coming to the fort. A nice descriptive job that did not go overboard (woops, pun was not intended), but provided just enough to set the scene and then you hammer us with the one-two punch of Harrison and Jackson. Excellent, as Mr. Burns might say.
Thank you, Mett! Yes, Wilkinson's spotted character was well known. Burr's too. An interesting pair!Mettermrck said:Knowing Wilkinson does speak for itself...not exactly a privilege. Good stuff, sir!
I'll try to get the next scene done soon. I've written part of it, and know basically where it needs to go. Wish me some time to add to my schedule!
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