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coz1 said:
So what's the topic to be, Anibal?
Oh yes, good to remember, Al :D

I don't know if there was something similar when Secret Master was the leader of the Guess-the-Author initiative, but anyways I think it is a nice subject to write on. So, next topic is:

An humilliating peace treaty imposed to your realm (or country, or duchy, or whatever)

Submissions until 13th June to my e-mail: celsoaraujo_ifgw at yahoo.com.br - Please send me a PM before writing if you're intending to participate! :) Since we have a limit of four authors, one must know if we already reached the limit. Anyway, I'll post here when the limit is over.
 
Well, Hajji, you could come by and buy a car while you are in Indianapolis...Just go to Crossroads on US 31 South and ask for Scott...I'll get you a good deal...:)
 
I'm sorry...I'm only 14 :D But if you're still there in 2 or 3 years I certainly will :)
 
*ahem*

I know it's already a bit early to do "announcements", but I need to say that I'm a bit worried. Without reason? Perhaps... but since this is the first time I run such nice initiative (the G-t-A), I think I have the right. :D

What I need to say is: until right now, I only received two messages from people telling they would actually write and submit something. That is, we still have more room for writers! :)

Hast thou ever had the will of writing a small tale and felt thou never hat the chance? :D I think it's a nice opportunity... ;) Ready for action? So, PM me telling so, and I will answer the message as soon as possible, either telling if thou art confirmed or if we're already full. Anyways, when (if) it gets full, I'll tell people here about it.

What art thou waiting for? :p

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About Hajji's travel to Indianapolis... hey man, if you can't actualy buy a car, why don't thou visit Scott even without the intention to buy one? :D It would be a nice tale for thee to share with us, the experience to meet that man...
 
Author #1


Edward, sat up as he heard the sound of the latch on his prison door turn. It was bad enough that he was still in France, but he was also held captive by the dubious King of France. He had been in this cell for what seemed like years, but in reality it had only been two months. But in that time, he had been served only watery soup with weevils and had not had his cell cleaned since his first day in captivity.

Meaning to say something to the guards, he rose to speak. Before he had a chance to say what was on his mind, the guard had entered and, along with two others, bound and gagged him. They walked him out of the cell and up the many flights of stairs it would take to reach the throne room.

As they walked, Edward occasionally fell, as he was weak. The guards simply dragged him instead. They had no love for this Duke. He was but a lowly representative of the King of England, and they would see that King put down this very day.

Upon reaching the throne room, Edward was thrown to the floor, still in his shackles. He could see feet, but his head and neck ached so much, he was unable to turn it to see the rest of their bodies. He waited for someone to speak to him. He would not give these barbarians any satisfaction.

“Sooo, this is a Duke,” a voice came from above. “This is the man that was to best us?”

“Yes, milord. He is the King’s cousin and personal ambassador. He will either sign over to you what you wish, or he will return home in several pieces as promised.”

“Excellent! We feel so giddy right now. We must skip!”

Edward saw two feet begin skipping back and forth in front of him. He tried very hard to strain his neck just to see the face of this…man.

“We think he wishes to gaze upon our precious face, do you not think, Bohemond? He should be careful lest he fall in love,” the voice said as the feet stopped skipping.

“We shall find out, milord,” another gruff voice said as Edward felt two large guards lift him from the ground to look at the King.

However, what Edward saw was no King, in the normal sense of the word. Instead he found himself looking at a prissy middle-aged man. Fat, barely clothed and sweaty, this man had a small tiara on his head and carried a riding crop in his hand. The King took his riding crop and ran it slowly from Edwards shoulder to his groin. Before Edward had a chance to protest, the King used it to slap him across the face.

“You should use more reverence when you look upon us, foolish Duke! You may have a King at home, but here you must salute Louis, the Queen of France!”

Trying hard to keep from grinning, even in pain, Edward said not a word. Instead, he tried to focus his mind on his manor back home. He tried to mentally walk the grounds and remember what needed attending to.

Louis took Edward’s face in his hands. “What a lovely face though. A pity to have to beat on it so. We should have liked to have dined with you prior to your capture, just to gaze upon it without having to look past the blood and welts.”

Edward could stand it no more. He lifted his head as best he could and spit. It was intended for the King, but instead dribbled off his chin into a puddle on the ground. The room shook with laughter. The guards dropped him on the floor and the King stood over him.

“Tis unfortunate that you have chosen this path, but it is of no matter to us. We have won; young lover, and we shall have you in our court forevermore, that we can assure you. Do you not think that is an easy price for your so-called King to accept for peace? We have occupied the entire south and have surrounded his men near Calais. The stupid English will either die fighting or drown in retreat, but they will not advance any further with God as our witness!”

Edward rolled over so he was able to face this…man. He tried very hard to speak, but nothing came out.

“You wish to agree or disagree?” the King asked.

Edward struggled to shake his head back and forth to signal “no.” Not liking this answer, Louis turned and walked back to his throne, gesturing for the guards to take him away. They picked him up and were leaving the room when a messenger burst in.

“Milord, milord…we have the King of England as our captive! He is being brought before Your Majesty as we speak!”

The King jumped up and began clapping wildly, “This is wonderful news, wonderful news indeed! I am as giddy as a child! I could kiss each and everyone of you…oh you handsome guards!!”

The guards in the room winced but did not let it show. They stood their ground and waited for the English King’s entrance. The guards escorting Edward were told to stop and they dropped him on the floor, standing at attention over him.

From the large door that marked the entrance to the throne room came three large knocks before it began to open. Stepping into the room was the King of England, Tancred, grandson to William the Conqueror. He was tall and had a full head of thick brown hair, and his shoulders were wide, making him look like a giant compared to the guards on either side of him.

As he stood waiting for his French counterpart to speak, his cool eyes looked directly at Louis. It did not take long for the French King to become uncomfortable so he turned away and poured himself a goblet of wine. Quaffing it down quickly, he turned back and walked behind Tancred to keep away from his watchful gaze.

“You have lost. That is all there is to say here. We have gone round and round with this war and we are the victors, thus the spoils go to us. We can ask for almost anything, but have settled on a list of five.”

He began to pace, “In order, we demand one, the six finest swine in England, not the continent mind you.” Turning quickly to look at Tancred, “And don’t try to be cute. We are talking about pork here…not nasty men such as yourself.”

Pacing again, he continued, “Two, a yearly visit from our dear sister who has since been locked away in the castles of the north. Three, two large chests filled with gold, silver, and jewels and to top it off, feathers. Yes, that’s right…feathers. We like feathers. Four, the title of all land you hold south of the Loire. And five, ten of your strongest men to serve in our court, starting with this one, right here!” He stopped by Edward and brought his crop down on him as he said these last words.

“You must be mad!” Tancred exclaimed.

“And you will soon be dead, as will all of your brave knights, if you do not sign the document my men are about to put to you. It lists all we have asked for and should not be too difficult to affix your signature to,” Louis answered coldly.

Tancred refused to budge on the matter. He solidly stood his ground as Louis walked around and around him. Realizing that it would take more than just telling him, to get Tancred to listen, Louis signaled for Edward’s guards to show Tancred they were serious.

The two guards lifted Edward from the ground and sat him in a chair by the throne. Louis walked behind the large tapestry that hung behind the throne itself and when he reappeared, he was carrying a bowl of something. Steam poured over the sides and he had a smile on his face. He walked over to Edward and gestured to one of the guards.

The guard bent down and unlaced the garment around Edward’s waist. Once loose, he gave a quick yank and Edward’s genitals were exposed. Louis held the bowl over Edward’s lap and looked up to Tancred. “Sure you won’t sign?”

Tancred was beat. Here was his own cousin, soon to be a slave to this nancy of a King. He almost thought it might be a blessing for Edward to lose his manhood given the rumors of the French court, but he knew that God would not forgive him if he allowed harm to come to Edward due to his own actions.

“Yes…yes, I’ll sign.” Tancred bowed his head, knowing that he had been bested. Edward would live, and in one piece, but the Kingdom of England on the continent would be lost. And lost to this…Queen of France.
 
Author #2


“The king of England has stated his terms.” said Idwal, bowing to the lady Elen. She sat at the window seat of her private chamber, her young son Cynan asleep with his head on her lap.

Bravely she mustered a small smile, “Then you’d best tell me how the land lies.”

“He has claimed the title of duke of Gwynedd for his son, William, and has made two of his closest supporters into counts of Powys and Perfed-Dwlad.”

“He has denied my son his inheritance, then.” there was no shock in Elen’s voice, only weary resignation. Tenderly she stroked her slumbering child’s golden hair back from his face, “And what is to become of us, Idwal? Now my husband is dead, and his titles taken by the English, what of us?”

“The king demands you marry William Fitz Roi, the man he’s giving our home to.” Without thinking Idwal clenched his right hand into a fist, and for a heartbeat he thought he did; then reality came back and he recalled that his hand was gone, severed at the wrist in battle no more than two weeks back. “It’s not right!” he burst out, with passion born of both grief and impotent rage. His outburst caused little Cynan to stir in his sleep but the child didn’t wake; Elen gestured at her husband’s advisor to hush before he woke the boy. Idwal continued more carefully, but his passion still burned as strongly, “Marrying you to one of his bastards, it’s not right. It’s an insult to you, your lord husband, God rest his soul, and to our people! He’s not content with conquering much of Wales, but he must shame us too.”

“My hand in marriage will lend a hint of respectability to this, take the title and the widow both and mayhap the locals will not complain so loud.” Elen ducked her head, unwilling to let Idwal see the tears that brimmed in her eyes and threatened to fall.

Idwal’s heart nearly broke; he took a step forwards, “Lady, if in any way I can help…”

“There is nothing to be done; to the victors go the spoils. I can only hope…this William is kind to our people.” “And to my son…and to me.” she added silently.



One week later.

The clatter of horse’s hooves altered the prisoners to the arrival of their new lord and master, and unspoken jailor. Elen was lead out along with the other important Welsh folk in the castle, lined up by their English guards to await their lord’s pleasure. At the head of the armed column rode a hatchet-faced man of about thirty years, tall and stocky he looked a tough warrior and hard master to please. He drew to a halt, dismounted and looked about crossly for his squire. The young man hurried over, only to receive a few sharp words on his tardiness, and his master’s helmet thrust into his hands. The lord flung back his mail coif and pulled off his arming cap, baring his close cropped black hair; he looked no friendlier in this more peaceful guise.

Leaving his escort behind he strode over to the waiting Welsh, and headed straight to Elen and demanded curtly in French, “You are Helen?”

“Elen.” she corrected politely in the same language.

The Norman backhanded her across the face, hard. Idwal threw himself forwards, trying to get between his dead lord’s wife and her husband-to-be. William turned to face him, resting his hand on the hilt of his sword, “Get back you mangy Welsh cur, afore I have you whipped like the dog you are.” Idwal didn’t understand a word of this, he could only speak Welsh, but the tone made the meaning clear. He looked to Elen for confirmation, and she gave a slight nod; Idwal stepped back to his place. The knight looked no happier, and asked Elen, “What is the matter with the dog?”

“It is against Welsh law for a man to strike his wife.” she explained, “And we are not yet married in any case.”

“But not English law, and that holds sway here now – Welsh law will soon cease to exist. Under English law a man may do as he pleases with his wife; as to our status, it matters not, you are my betrothed and so nearly as good as my wife. Your name is Helen, not some crude gurgling noise from savage’s throat, understood?”

“Yes, my lord.” Elen’s cheek was beginning to throb painfully, and she couldn’t risk upsetting this stranger any more; all of her husbands people were subject to his whim, and she had no reason to think he wouldn’t take out his bad temper on them.

“Good. The name suits you better, the Helen of legend was also a rare beauty, just as you are.” satisfied with his compliment William turned to face the other Welsh people gathered before him, and proclaimed loudly, “We slaughtered more than nine hundred Welshmen on the field of battle, we killed your lord, we took this land by the sword. However the sword need not rule it; learn to submit, as your lady has done, and you will find your lives tolerable. To become English is to become civilised, to resist is to die.” his next words were for Elen alone, brusque and to the point, “Translate it.”

Elen did so, her halting, limited French hampering her Welsh translation somewhat. As soon as she finished William began to talk again, “From this day forth you will give your children English names, your low born will learn to speak English as our low born already do, your high born will speak French, as our high born do. You will be taxed by English taxes, ruled by English law – you will; become no different to those in the very heart of England.” Again Elen translated.

William looked down at the five-year-old boy clutching her skirts, half hiding from these strange men, “Ah, the boy. How very fortunate he is here, it saves time.” he seized Cynan’s arm, and dragged him away from his mother, handing him off to one of his men. Elen made a frantic grab for her child, but William barred her way, catching hold of both her arms, telling her, “The king orders him taken to a monastery in the midlands; he will grow to become a monk. Surely you didn’t think he’d leave the brat here, to act as a centre to rebellion?”

Elen struggled, finding strength she never knew she possessed from her son’s frantic cries, “Mama! Mama!”, but it was not enough. William hit her again, so hard she would have fallen if he weren’t holding her; Idwal screamed a battle cry, and hurled himself towards the Norman. Letting go of Elen, William drew his sword; the blade flashed once, and Idwal collapsed into the dust, his head severed. Elen stared at his body, frozen by horror; her child’s pleas brought her around, and she started to run towards him, only to be grabbed once again by William, and her arm twisted behind her back near to breaking point. Through tear filled eyes she saw her son and his keeper ride out of the gate, the boy reaching back towards her with his short little arms, weeping.
 
Author #3


"The Duke will see you now."
King James stood up, and beckoned to his entourage to remain there, as he did not want to be further embarrassed by what would surely be a set of humiliating terms. It was enough that a mere duke-A duke!- had beaten James's royal armies, but to have these people listen to the duke humiliate him further - No, he would not have them with him.

James arrived in the Treaty Room of Wyrmoughlough Castle, and the first thing the hated man (James was unable to think the name, let alone say it, he was so humiliated) said was "Firstly I would like to have your daughter in marriage. You will be expected to provide a dowry, in addition to the terms of the peace."
"Very well, I will have her brought to you tomorrow."
"I understand she is with your entourage."
"Meaning?"
"I would like her brought here. Now."
James had little choice, as he wished he had when he saw the hated duke moving his hand... somehwere a few moments later. I will kill this man, somehow, for this. He sill be assassinated in his bed, and castrated, and branded with a hot iron...
"What was that, just now, James?"
"Nothing! You want my lands up to the Thames from the Channel?"
"Yes. And don't forget the city of Calais. I am also going to require you to swear an oath of vassalage to me."
"Vassalage? That is out of the question!" James had expected severe terms, but both his daughter and this? "I absolutely refuse to..." He trailed off, as two guards approached. "You are in my power, James. Remember that."
"Yes. All right, I accept." James sighed, heavily.
"Now, I suppose that is all for today. I have a priest, and I don't really expect a large wedding, so we will discuss the dowry and vassalage tomorrow."

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"The Duke will see you now."
James rose, on the second day, and walked slowly into the Treaty Room. You Devil. You dog-headed beast. You have been in bed with my daughter, my DAUGHTER, and you have made her a whore, like what you are, and you are making me pay your cursed expenses. You will burn in Hell, and God will spit upon your body, and I will dance on your grave.
"Ah, James, wonderful to see you. Now about the dowry. I think one pound of gold will be sufficient to cover the costs of the wedding, and of course, the occasion would do for a new castle for my bride, which you will pay for..." James stopped listening, merely agreeing whenever it seemed he must, and imagined the duke being tossed from a tower and being ripped apart by dogs."And, as we have spent most of the day discussing, the dowry, you may come back tomorrow to swear vassalage."

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"The Duke will see you now."
James rose, on the second day, and walked slowly into the Treaty Room. You Devil. You dog-headed beast. You have been in bed with my daughter, my DAUGHTER, and you have made her a whore, like what you are, and you are making me pay your cursed expenses. You will burn in Hell, and God will spit upon your body, and I will dance on your grave.
"Ah, James, wonderful to see you. Now about the dowry. I think one pound of gold will be sufficient to cover the costs of the wedding, and of course, the occasion would do for a new castle for my bride, which you will pay for..." James stopped listening, merely agreeing whenever it seemed he must, and imagined the duke being tossed from a tower and being ripped apart by dogs."And, as we have spent most of the day discussing, the dowry, you may come back tomorrow to swear vassalage."

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James sat in his rooms, thinking of the day to come. It was night, and surely everyone else was asleep. He sat and played with a knife and a piece of wood. Vassalage to a dog. This is what this comes to. A dog that rapes my daughter. What do I do?

I could submit to it. But should I? I have lost my self-respect, and likely the respect of all others. And it would be to that cursed dog-man.

I could kill him. But how? He has guards around him at all times. It would be difficult to get by them, and he would surely wak up before I got to him, if I got by the guards at all, and further protct himself.

I could leave, and never return. But that would leave my daughter in his hands, and my Realm in a poor state in which anyone could take power.

I could submit.

I could kill him.

I could leave.

Submit

Kill

Leave

That morning, King James was found in a state of madness, sitting in his bedroom and carving pictures of dogs on the wooden table. He was declared unfit to hold the rank and title of king, and his four year old son was given the throne. King Richard saw nothing wrong in swearing vassalage to the nice man who walked around with Richard's sister.
 
Author #4


The doors opened at exactly the same time. The duke of Joachimsburg could look straight into the eyes of his counterpart, count Rosenkrantz. They both took precisely ten steps before taking of their hats and bowing to each other. After the bow count Rosenkrantz introduced himself and the man he represented. The duke of Joachimsburg did the same. Not one title, not one estate was forgotten. This ritual adherence to etiquette was in stark contrast to the chaos that had preceded it.

The duke of Joachimsburg remembered the day all to well. Just about one year ago it was. Not far from the very room in which count Rosenkrantz was currently listing their demands. The prince had been extraordinarily energetic that hot August day. Shouting, laughing and looking at maps. Even the duke of Joachimsburg, the wise old man, had been caught up in the moment. Even he had been convinced that by God they were going to make it. The initial reports from the generals had been filled with the same optimism.

But that tune had changed. The money ran out, the soldiers died, every ally betrayed them. One winter had come and gone and now it was August again. The sun shone brightly on Sachsen, just as it had one year ago. It didn't just shine on the good people of Leipzig though, it also shone on six thousand pikemen, musketeers and cavalrymen from Brandenburg who were camped just four miles from the city. An invading army at rest, waiting for the diplomats to settle the matter.

In the distance a cannon was fired that made the windows in the room tremble. They would claim it was an accident, but he suspected that the count had ordered it to scare him. It would take more than a distant cannon to scare Johann Heinrich, duke of Joachimsburg. He had been doing this for thirty years and he had a feeling this would be the last time he was the chief negotiator for Sachsen. And what a way to end a career.

As the demands were read out he couldn't keep himself from staring at the count's lips. After every word he twisted his lips slightly, as if he was trying to take it back. Maybe I really am getting old, thought the duke. He forced himself to listen to the demands, but they were really not surprising. Shocking perhaps, but not surprising considering in what state Sachsen was. Town after town, village after village, farm after farm. Brandenburg wanted it all. Almost of course, the prince of Sachsen was still left with some land to get by on. Anything else would have been unheard of.

Count Rosenkrantz finished his list by adding that Brandenburg demanded that their troops would be fed for half a year. The duke smiled gently before delivering the counter-proposal. The difference was cosmetic between what Brandenburg wanted and what Sachsen wanted to deliver. One less village here, one less prestige-damaging paragraph there. He also took the time for some formal complaints about the wording in Brandenburg's proposal. For instance, in the third chapter paragraph five they forgot to mention that the Prince of Sachsen is in fact duke of Eisental. Until such flaws are mended they can regrettably not continue negotiations. Yes, a great shame.

That night the six thousand pikemen, musketeers and cavalrymen broke camp and marched on Leipzig. They stopped just short of the city but didn't forget to burn parts of the city wall and pillage farmer's fields.

There was something brutish and uncivilised about making final statements. The prince had a choice between either accepting the demands or the army would march into Leipzig and make him accept them. The duke didn't hesitate to complain about the unlawfulness of such actions. Delay negotiations, the prince had told him. The prince was waiting for something, anything that could help him. The duke was convinced that only a miracle could save them now and if God wanted a miracle there would be no need to wait. He had delayed negotiations for one day and he could have delayed them for one month if the count had played by the rules. But he didn't. The old codes that had ruled European diplomacy for centuries seemed to have lost all power.

“Duke Johann, what would my father have done in this situation?”

The prince looked so helpless, his face hoping that the duke would know what to do. The duke had an urge to say that the prince's father, bless his soul, would never have gotten himself in this kind of situation. Enemy troops outside Leipzig? Not likely. He decided not to anger the prince as it would be bad both for his personal health and it would hardly help anyone.

“Accept their demands, sire. We have no choice.”

The prince seemed to age ten years as he signed the document.

Later that day the celebrations of the enemy soldiers were audible even from the prince's private office. The duke could almost see before him how new masters entered castles and gave orders with loud voices. His very own estate was part of the settlement and would soon be in the hands of some lucky man. A colonel maybe? Perhaps even a mercenary? He didn't really miss the estate, he just wished he could have brought his books with him to Leipzig.

The prince was angry. Not his usual kind of anger, the hot frustration that would erupt whenever things weren't the way he wanted them to be. No, this was a simmering, intense hatred. The kind of hatred that could wait for years until it finally had revenge. The prince was still young, he had time to wait. For the first time the duke was happy to be of such high age. There were certainly more chapters in this story, but at least he wouldn't be alive to see them unfold.
 
So, here we have the four submissions for this issue. :) I can give some hints of the authors tomorrow or after tomorrow. I'm also avoiding to comment the issues right now. :p
 
1. A nice story with nice dialogues. The intrigue was perhaps a bit naive. In all I liked the story, it kept me reading with interest. Probably a new, younger writer

2. Also a good story. Some inspiration from Brave heart perhaps? This was mean

Anibal said:
Your name is Helen, not some crude gurgling noise from savage’s throat, understood?”

Good dialogue and descriptions. Made me feel like being there, watching the horrible situation.

3. I found myself a bit bewildered in the start as to what the story was about though things cleared up after reading a bit more. Perhaps the style of writing was a bit static but the descriptions of what James wanted to do with the bastard were colourful. I wasn’t expecting that kind of ending. I guess James must have been utterly frustrated. If I were James I guess I would rather go down in a blaze of glory trying to cut down the horrible Duke. However we are all different.

4. I liked this tale. The description of the relation between the Duke and the Prince was a bit confusing but that’s not a big issue. Otherwise I really liked the style and the ending was very classy indeed. Overall a very good story.
 
#1. Solid delivery. At first I thought it was going to be a Life of Brian-style conversation ("Stvike him centuvion, voughly!") but I was mistaken. The king of France was indeed dubious and I'm a bit sceptical about that character. It's probably just me, but he seemed out of place in the otherwise serious story. Anyway, one can hardly say that the author has a poor imagination. :) Such details aside, good dialogue and good descriptions. Perhaps an English author. ;)

I'll edit in reviews of the rest later...
 
First, I found it interesting that all of these seemed to take place during the CK era. It seems obvious where people's minds are these days. :D

1. I must admit, that I felt the writer tried a bit too hard to express the humiliation felt by the English King. Imaginative, yes, but not particularly believable, at least the way it was presented here. Yet I did enjoy the descriptive nature of the scene. I especially liked the attempted spit by Edward. As well, even though slightly out of the range of realism, the character of the French "King" was fleshed out fairly well. Well written dialogue and descriptive narrative were used well, and even if the plot was slightly odd, it did serve to express the humiliation.

2. Very well written piece. Not enjoyable, per se, as the end result is rather sad, but the plot is well done. My only complaint would be perhaps a bit more character set up. Elan is given some structure in the first part, and thus one feels for her by the end. Not as much with Idwal, or William for that matter (though seeing as he only appears at the end, he does not really need too much set up.) The dialogue was sharp, and the whole thing had a nice self-contained feel to it. I had no problem gaining a feel for what had happened prior. Well done.

3. Somewhat like the first piece, this one also tries a bit too hard to express the humiliation felt by the loser. It's understandable that a King might be humiliated by losing to a Duke, but he would not be able to become his vassal (at least in CK), and thus this lessons some of the humiliation. Certainly the rape of his daughter is a stronger insult. Further, I was left wondering who this Duke was. There was never any real description of him, other than his title. This might have led to stronger feelings of hate for him, or more sympathy for the King. Still, the dialogue was effective, and the ending had a touch of humor that I enjoyed.

4. I must say, I was of two minds about this one. On the one hand, the peace is not so much humiliating, but shameful. In other words, it is the Prince's own fault, it seemed to me, that he was in this situation. However, the topic description did not specify where the humiliation should come from, and thus the piece also had a uniqueness to it, a self-humiliation of sorts. The descriptions were well done, and what little dialogue there was, fit the mood. The characters were fleshed out well for the amount of space used to do so. All in all, an interesting piece, and well done.

Once again, nice work for all of the people that participated, and thanks again to Anibal for stepping in to keep this going.
 
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Anyone else care to offer their opinions?? :confused:
 
Author 1: The only problem with this one is that I don't know what to make of the French monarch. Is this person insane, some sort of transvestite or something, merely amused by the fact that he acts like this? However, it is embarrassing what Edward is forced through.

Author 2: Well written. I like the arrogance of the English guy, Fitz Roi. And I somehow suspect that Cynran may be castrated as well as taking his vows.

Author 3: Bit weak at first, but not awfully bad. I am not sure if ignoring mention of the name of the duke is meant to make us dislike him more, or if he would seem worse if he were described more fully.
Coz1 has a point that Dukes vassalising Kings is not allowed in CK, but I suppose it was possible that, due to the specific territories lost by James, he was demoted low enough to be vassalisable and the author neglected to mention that fact. Bit of a stretch, though, and an extreme oversight by the author.

Author 4: Didn't really seem humiliating. However, besides the fact that it didn't really address the topic fully, it was really well written. I think that if the topic was changed so that this one fit better, it would have one of the better stories.
 
AUTHOR #1: coz1

Recommended reading:

Dai Viet: The True Son of Heaven - EU2
For the Glory of Persia - Victoria


AUTHOR #2: frogbeastegg

Recommended reading:

Blood Red Hand: The Dukes of Ulster - Crusader Kings


AUTHOR #3: J. Passepartout

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Herr Passepartout und dia Nation Austria - EU1
Timid Timurids? The Post-Lenkh Years; or I Was a Teenage Dictator - EU2


AUTHOR #4: Mr Dog

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Defending the Revolution - HoI


again, we had some authors commenting their own work ;)
 
I'm the only author who didn't try their hand at reviewing, d'oh! I thought it would be a bit obvious, a new author turning up out of the blue, that I had written one of the stories. I’ll try to put something together to complete the set; fair’s fair, you commented for me so I shall endeavour to return the favour.

Thank you all for your comments :)

Judge, no inspiration from Braveheart (I hate that film), but quite a bit from history; and maybe a tiny little bit from Sharon Penman’s Welsh trilogy, after starting to read the first book in her series I thought Wales would be well suited to a story about tragic, humiliating defeat.

coz1, I have tried to take your note on characterisation aboard, you may have noticed Eve and Colban had better introductions than the others in my story. Your advice was quite...timely.

J. Passepartout, now you've got me thinking about what did happen to the characters. I wouldn't be surprised if Cynan had a small accident, say...falling down some stairs after clumsily beheading himself with a two-handed sword.
 
Great job to everyone. I appreciate everyone's opinion about my piece. As you can tell by my review of my own work, I was less than pleased with some of the results. I admit that I am not very good at letting my stuff "stew" long enough and I fear that this causes some of my work to be of less caliber. Must work on that. :rolleyes:

It looks like J. Passepartout and I are on the same schedule when it comes to submitting work here. A wonderful "guess-the-author" mate, if I do say so myself. :) I look forward to the next round, but I would love to see a few more people try their hand at reviewing. Just my two ducats (boy, I say that a lot - but it somehow seems to fit. :D )
 
Yeah, I've drifted into the whole "submit it the night before the deadline" thing, while when Secret Master had it, I had my first submission in almost immediately.

Concerning the vassalisation in my story, I had been working under the assumption that in real life, if you won, you would do whatever you wanted. But I thought that if I said that in the review, it would be too obvious which one I wrote.


I would also like to add that Anibal did an excellent job picking my favorite of my own stories in the Recommended Reading bit. And the other authors's stories are pretty good too.
 
I didn't even find the time to post a review of every story to mask my participance, ech. Now it looks like I was just out to offend coz1. :eek:o

IMHO losing a war and being forced to hand over lots of land (could have made that clearer) is humiliating enough. And if it's a war that you've started yourself, now that's just catastrophic! Alright, so maybe it's just me who has a skewed idea of humiliation. A stricter adherence to the subject can't hurt. Anyway, thanks for the kind words. And kudos to the other writers. The stories submitted for 'Guess-the-Author' are of so high quality it makes you impressed that there are so many talented writers here. (the undersigned excepted naturally, my humbleness forbids me etc ;))

Bit bizarre to see that only one non-submitter wrote a comment this round. Come on, people! If I, a n00b with only a two page AAR under my belt, can comment, so can you. Go on, it'll be fun. Pretty please?