Thanks to Amric and Redwolf for getting this wonderful idea started again, and also to the four contributors for all actually turning in their assignments! The last one never did get off the ground, as I was the only one with a submission.
Author #1 (Dandy Dan)
A very entertaining work. An old style detective story from the future, brilliant twist. The direction of the narrative seems to change: At the beginning he is speaking to the reader, and later he's relaying his story directly to Marguerie the Truthseeker, or so it seemed, and it seemed hard towards the end to realize who exactly was being spoken to. In the beginning: The dame was Marguerie the Truthseeker (where do they come up with these names?), a novice journalist of little repute but much power and at the end: What I am? If you, as a Truthseeker, cannot see the simple answer to that and know to shut up about it, then perhaps you have chosen the wrong occupation. At the very least the latter part should have been in quotes to help clarify this. Outside of this little nitpick, it was certainly entertaining.
Author #2
As others have said, this comes across flat and really unimaginative. The story dealt directly with this month's topic of "A Duel" and dealt with specifically the duel itself, and not really with the surrounding issues or the things leading up to it.
Author #3
Just like with Author #2, the story dealt with this months' topic directly, with very little else surrounding it. I'm not a big Star Wars fan, and I don't fully understand the ending.
Author #4
Clearly the best of the four. Very thorough writing style, and the "story" around the "story" was very well developed (which is what was lacking in Author #2 and #3's pieces. My one main critique, I found the fourth paragraph a bit hard to follow: Then came the night Sarah told him about Ari. The jeweler‘s son was promised Sarah's hand. The night she came to Joe in tears, he swore they would be wed. Joe went to Ralph that night, to tell him what had been happening. That's when the violence started. Ralph felt it was an affront to him and his crew. There were too many things being introduced here too quickly, and each in just a few short words. It should have been expanded a bit more. After such a well written and thought out piece, it's a pity it ends in a cliff hanger. I demand a sequel!
As to "Guessing the Author" I haven't any clue to any of them, though I'd guess the fourth writer has submitted works for GTA in the past on several occasions.
Oh, and Peter Ebbesen gets an A+ for his incredibly in depth review of all four stories, making every thing I just wrote above look like junk by comparison! I think one of the best things about GTA is not just reading the stories, but reading other's critiques of the story, because 90% of the time, these are things I entirely missed myself.
Author #1 (Dandy Dan)
A very entertaining work. An old style detective story from the future, brilliant twist. The direction of the narrative seems to change: At the beginning he is speaking to the reader, and later he's relaying his story directly to Marguerie the Truthseeker, or so it seemed, and it seemed hard towards the end to realize who exactly was being spoken to. In the beginning: The dame was Marguerie the Truthseeker (where do they come up with these names?), a novice journalist of little repute but much power and at the end: What I am? If you, as a Truthseeker, cannot see the simple answer to that and know to shut up about it, then perhaps you have chosen the wrong occupation. At the very least the latter part should have been in quotes to help clarify this. Outside of this little nitpick, it was certainly entertaining.
Author #2
As others have said, this comes across flat and really unimaginative. The story dealt directly with this month's topic of "A Duel" and dealt with specifically the duel itself, and not really with the surrounding issues or the things leading up to it.
Author #3
Just like with Author #2, the story dealt with this months' topic directly, with very little else surrounding it. I'm not a big Star Wars fan, and I don't fully understand the ending.
Author #4
Clearly the best of the four. Very thorough writing style, and the "story" around the "story" was very well developed (which is what was lacking in Author #2 and #3's pieces. My one main critique, I found the fourth paragraph a bit hard to follow: Then came the night Sarah told him about Ari. The jeweler‘s son was promised Sarah's hand. The night she came to Joe in tears, he swore they would be wed. Joe went to Ralph that night, to tell him what had been happening. That's when the violence started. Ralph felt it was an affront to him and his crew. There were too many things being introduced here too quickly, and each in just a few short words. It should have been expanded a bit more. After such a well written and thought out piece, it's a pity it ends in a cliff hanger. I demand a sequel!
As to "Guessing the Author" I haven't any clue to any of them, though I'd guess the fourth writer has submitted works for GTA in the past on several occasions.
Oh, and Peter Ebbesen gets an A+ for his incredibly in depth review of all four stories, making every thing I just wrote above look like junk by comparison! I think one of the best things about GTA is not just reading the stories, but reading other's critiques of the story, because 90% of the time, these are things I entirely missed myself.